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Many people Believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Many people Believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. v. 1
Majority of the population are of the opinion that socal media's (such as Facebook) have had a great disastrous influence on the people and communities. I strongly agree because these sites have become channels for fraudulence and promotion of immoral sexual acts. One of the reasons why social networking sites have had a big wrong impact on individuals and society is that they have become avenue for fraudulent activities. This is because most people want to become rich without earning it through hard work, thereby they engage in various activities to extort money from others through the internet by claiming to be who they are not. For instance, in Nigeria, the rate of fraudulent activity has been on the increase in the last two years, one reason is because of the overwhelming development of the internet. Therefore victims of fraudsters are committing suicide. Furthermore, the internet have brought about initiation of antisocial sexual escapades. This is because most pictures, videos, and animations on social sites are ponographic rather than being educative and entertaining, thereby making people to engage in different awful sexual acts, such as sexual perversions. For example, it was recorded in the Daily Newspaper recently that there is tremendous increase in the number of rape cases and sexual assaults. As a result of this there is growth in the spread of Sexually transmitted infections in the Society. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the internet have caused more harm than good to the population and communities at large.
Majority of the population are of the opinion that
socal
media's (such as Facebook) have had a great disastrous influence on the
people
and communities. I
strongly
agree
because
these sites have become channels for fraudulence and promotion of immoral
sexual
acts.

One of the reasons why social networking sites have had a
big
wrong
impact on individuals and society is that they have become avenue for fraudulent activities. This is
because
most
people
want to become rich without earning it through
hard
work, thereby they engage in various activities to extort money from others through the internet by claiming to be who they are not.
For instance
, in Nigeria, the rate of fraudulent activity has been on the increase in the last two years, one reason is
because
of the overwhelming development of the internet.
Therefore
victims of fraudsters are committing suicide.

Furthermore
, the internet have brought about initiation of antisocial
sexual
escapades. This is
because
most pictures, videos, and animations on social sites are
ponographic
rather
than being educative and entertaining, thereby making
people
to engage in
different
awful
sexual
acts, such as
sexual
perversions.
For example
, it
was recorded
in the Daily Newspaper recently that there is tremendous increase in the number of rape cases and
sexual
assaults.
As
a result of this there is growth in the spread of
Sexually
transmitted infections in the Society.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that the internet have caused more harm than
good
to the population and communities at large.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people Believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
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