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Some people believe that price is the only consideration while buyingsomething. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give youropinion and include relevant examples. v.1

Some people believe that price is the only consideration while buyingsomething. Give youropinion and include relevant examples. v. 1
Generally, few percentages of the population consider money as a primary element when purchasing a product or service. I agree to the statement as wealth always plays an important role in people’s life and it is safe to spend money on necessary goods than the luxuries. On one hand, advertisement plays a vital role in marketing a product by pressurizing people to buy things despite of their capacity to afford. People are mesmerized by the adverts shown in television, roads, banners, shops and lose their ability to re-think if the product is worth the money. It resists them to categorise the products based on their quality and durability. For instance, people are habituated to spend plenty of money on any product or services where discounts are offered irrespective of its necessity. On the other hand, mankind now a days are interested in owning luxury products even if their account balance does not favour. However, banks have found the solution. They provide credit cards which helps people to achieve their desires and pushes them into debt. There are situations where money should not be the primary consideration, for instance, in emergency cases related to hospitals. Another demonstration is, people buy luxurious homes by taking loans though cost effective homes are available in the market and struggle to repay. I would like to conclude stating that, money needs to be spent wisely and it should be the primary consideration before investing into any product or service, as wealth is just a variable and not a constant.
Generally
, few percentages of the population consider
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money
as a

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primary
element when purchasing a
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product
or service. I
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agree
to
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the


statement as wealth always plays an
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important
role in
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people’s
life and it

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is
safe to spend
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money
on necessary
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goods
than the luxuries.

On one hand, advertisement plays a vital role in marketing a
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product
by

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pressurizing
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people
to
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buy
things
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despite of
their capacity to afford.

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People
are mesmerized
by the adverts shown in television, roads,

banners, shops and lose their ability to re-
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think
if the
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product
is worth

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the
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money
. It resists them to
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categorise
the
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products
based on
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their


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quality
and durability.
For instance
,
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people
are habituated
to
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spend


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plenty
of
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money
on any
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product
or services where discounts
are offered


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irrespective
of its necessity.

On the other hand
, mankind
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now a days
are interested
in owning luxury

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products
even if their account balance does not
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favour
.
However
, banks

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have
found the solution. They provide credit cards which
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helps
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people
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to


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achieve
their desires and pushes them into debt. There are
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situations


where
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money
should not be the primary consideration,
for instance
, in

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emergency
cases related to hospitals. Another demonstration is,
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people


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buy
luxurious homes by taking loans though cost effective homes are

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available
in the market and struggle to repay.

I would like
to conclude
stating that,
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money
needs to
be spent
wisely


and it should be the primary consideration
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before
investing into any

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product
or service, as wealth is
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just
a variable and not a constant.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Some people believe that price is the only consideration while buyingsomething. Give youropinion and include relevant examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
23 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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