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Some people believe that people should make efforts to fight climate cha

Some people believe that people should make efforts to fight climate cha 5ARED
These days, Due to the pollution the weather pattern of the world are in changing form. But What is the best effective method for controlling the change in the climate? . Few people thinks that the individual should do their own efforts in order to fight with these. And Personally, I agree with this thought so in this essay, I will discuss both side of the argument and draw the conclusion. Firstly, In this today world peoples efforts on small thing also can change the entire things of the world. The number of youngsters in the world are literate as the can make some moment to fresh and clean the environment. As there are different sources that makes changes in the globalization. Water pollution, Air pollution are the best example of it. Individual can change the pattern of the weather by help of the government. As government is the head of the country so with the help of the individual they can implement some regulation ton control the pollution and the climate. In other hand, the atmosphere can cause an individual with the different sorts of the problem. As we know due to the development of the technology, which is the necessary parts in this era, pollution occurs which adversely affects the weather. So, people should be capable of living with this condition as it is because if the industrialization is in developing phase then it is obvious it is danger to the environment. To conclude, although the development of any sorts of facilities and technology but to live a healthier life the leader of the country and the individual should accelerate efforts and implement some regulation towards it.
These days, Due to the
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pollution
the weather pattern of the
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world
are in changing form.
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But
What is the best effective method for controlling the
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change
in the climate?
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people
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thinks
that the
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individual
should do their
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efforts in order to fight with these. And
Personally
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agree
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in this essay, I will discuss both side of the argument and draw the conclusion.

Firstly
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today
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world
peoples efforts on
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change
the entire things of the
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world
. The number of youngsters in the
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world
are literate as the can
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make
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some
moment to fresh and clean the environment.
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different
sources that
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makes
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changes
in the globalization. Water
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pollution
, Air
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pollution
are the best example of it.
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Individual
can
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change
the pattern of the weather by
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help
of the
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government
is the head of the country
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they can implement
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regulation ton control the
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pollution
and the climate.

In other hand, the atmosphere can cause an
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individual
with the
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different
sorts of the problem. As we know due to the development of the technology, which is the necessary parts in this era,
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pollution
occurs which
adversely
affects the weather.
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,
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people
should be capable of living with this condition as it is
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because
if the industrialization is in developing phase then it is obvious it is
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danger
to the environment.

To conclude
, although the development of any sorts of facilities and technology
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but
to
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live
a healthier life the leader of the country and the
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individual
should accelerate efforts and implement
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some
regulation towards it.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that people should make efforts to fight climate cha

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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