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Some people believe that only teachers should not assess students as students should be allowed to do that as well. According to their view, schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. v.1

Some people believe that only teachers should not assess students as students should be allowed to do that as well. According to their view, schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. v. 1
First of all, teachers have the opportunity to find out from this kind of test how good and clearly, their students understand the lectures. It will help them to improve and perfect their knowledge and experience. Also, teachers who get high grades must be rewarded financially or otherwise. On the other hand, the teachers who receive low grades must be sanctioned, for example by decreasing their salary. So, this can help to uplift the level of professionalism among the teachers. Second of all, students will more often attend lectures because they will be asked to evaluate their teachers. Students will have the opportunity to choose the best teachers because if a teacher gets a low grade he or she may be fired and replaced with the better one. Finally, the quality of education will increase dramatically. Students will be getting more interesting and professional lectures. Also, they will constantly attend classes in order to listen to an amazing lecture and make an evaluation of the current teacher. In addition to those practical benefits, a school will be better funded by it is sponsors and appreciated in the community. This, in its turn, will attract more students because it will be an honour to study in such a school. To sum up, I think that evaluation of teachers by their students will bring many benefits and allow students as well as teachers to gain more knowledge and experience.
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First of all
,
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have the opportunity to find out from this kind of
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test
how
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good
and
clearly
, their
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students
understand the
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lectures
. It will
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help
them to
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improve
and perfect their knowledge and experience.
Also
,
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teachers
who
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get
high grades
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must
be rewarded
financially
or
otherwise
.
On the other hand
, the
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teachers
who receive low grades
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must
be sanctioned
,
for example
by decreasing their salary.
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So
, this can
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help
to uplift the level of professionalism among the teachers.

Second of all,
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students
will more
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often
attend
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lectures
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because
they will
be asked
to evaluate their
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teachers
.
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Students
will have the opportunity to choose the best
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teachers
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because
if a
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teacher
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gets
a low grade he or she may
be fired
and replaced with the better one.

Finally
, the quality of education will increase
dramatically
.
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Students
will be getting more interesting and professional
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lectures
.
Also
, they will
constantly
attend classes in order to listen to an amazing
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lecture
and
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make
an evaluation of the
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current
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teacher
.
In addition
to those practical benefits, a school will be better funded by it is sponsors and appreciated in the community. This, in its turn, will attract more
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students
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because
it will be an
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honour
to study in such a school.

To sum up, I
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think
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teachers
by their
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students
will bring
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many
benefits and
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allow
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students
as well
as
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teachers
to gain more knowledge and experience.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that only teachers should not assess students as students should be allowed to do that as well. According to their view, schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
237 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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