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Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choice. LRN8
There are a number of people who claim that nowadays they have lots of opportunities. This essay agrees with this statement because thanks to developing of technology we could do everything rapidly. First of all, I would like to talk about comparison of past and present time consequently if we take a glance at a century ago, we will see that going anywhere, meeting with anybody or geting education are more effortless now. Forwhy, telephone or fast cars did not exist in the past in the contrast of present. For example, we want to learn how to play the piano but we do not have lots of money to pay to private teachers, then we can find an app and download it easily. Once and for all, it will be solved and we will reach our ambitions. On the other hand, technology is not the only reason of existing lots of chance today so laws are not strict at the same time. For instance, even few decades ago women could not be a doctor, a lawyer or a police consequently, nurse or teacher were the most apropriate occupant for them. Owing to the facts, if a woman tried to educate for being a doctor, she would be condemned and insulted by teachers and people. But nowadays, women and men have the same rights and that is why all people can decide their own decision and others can not interfere. In conclusion, we have more comfortable life and too much choice due to technology and some changes in laws.
There are a number of
people
who claim that nowadays they have lots of opportunities. This essay
agrees
with this statement
because
thanks to developing of technology we could do everything
rapidly
.

First of all
, I would like to talk about comparison of past and present time
consequently
if we take a glance at a century ago, we will
see
that going anywhere, meeting with anybody or
geting
education are more effortless
now
.
Forwhy
, telephone or
fast
cars did not exist in the past in the contrast of present.
For example
, we want to learn how to play the piano
but
we do not have lots of money to pay to private teachers, then we can find an app and download it
easily
. Once and for all, it will be
solved and
we will reach our ambitions.

On the other hand
, technology is not the
only
reason of existing lots of chance
today
so
laws are not strict at the same time.
For instance
, even few decades ago women could not be a doctor, a lawyer or a police
consequently
, nurse or teacher were the most
apropriate
occupant for them. Owing to the facts, if a woman tried to educate for being a doctor, she would
be condemned
and insulted by teachers and
people
.
But
nowadays, women and
men
have the same rights and
that is
why all
people
can decide their
own
decision
and others
can not interfere.

In conclusion
, we have more comfortable life and too much choice due to technology and
some
changes
in laws.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choice.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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