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should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among the poor nations by providing such things as food and education or is it the responsibility of the government of poor nations to look after their citizens themselves.

should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among the poor nations by providing such things as food and education or is it the responsibility of the government of poor nations to look after their citizens themselves. GRmB
According to the human birth, every persone does not birth with a silver spoon in their mouth. Actually, some others born with lots of struggle and some others born with a buckets of hopes. due to the globalization, there are lots of people who do not have proper wealth to complete their daily tasks. In taht case, government of the country should consider about their nations' daily lives. Moreover, some others have richest background and facilities which is based on their own properties. consequently, thses kind of wealthy people can provide several services and facilities to enhance the poorest lives. In that essay, I would like to discuss both views in that context. first and foremost, Actually government have lots of responsibility about their nations' lives. Due to that, controlling systems of the country should have consider about the people who do not have the similar potential than other people. For example, Sri lanka is still developing country which have high population. In fact, there are lots of people who don't have proper wealth to continue their tasks, but srilankan people have a best educational backgrounds, because sri lankan government has been made the educational similarity for all the people who lived in the country whether they are rich or poor. Not only that but also, they provide primary and secondary education without any charges. Moreover, every person can be received free education. Actually, these kind of methods create most valuable opportunities to poor nations who do not have proper wealth to continue their studies without any stress. In addition to these, according to the humanity, richest people can help to poorests to success their lives journey during their hard time period. In fact, providing facilities is one of the most impressive help which is useful to reconstruct the poorests' failures. For instance; somalia is one of the poorest country which do not have best economical background. Therefore some other rich countries donate resources and service to somalian people to continue their lives. Such as, food donations, health and educational resources including others facilities and etc. These kinds of phenomenon create strobg connection between the two stages of people who are lived in the same country. And also it helps to refurbish the poor system in the country. In conclusion, government should have some kind of responsibility about their citizens who are suffered from the life struggle. overall, all they people should consider about the eachothers who are lived in same country and who do not have strong wealth.
According to the human birth, every
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persone
does not birth with a silver spoon in their mouth. Actually,
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others born with
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lots of struggle
and
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others born with
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a buckets
of hopes.

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due
to the globalization, there are
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lots
of
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people
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who
do not have proper
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wealth
to complete their daily tasks.

In
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taht
case,
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government
of the
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country
should
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consider about their
nations' daily
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lives
.
Moreover
,
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some
others have
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richest
background and facilities which
is based
on their
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own
properties.
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consequently
,
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thses
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kind
of wealthy
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people
can provide several services and facilities to enhance the poorest
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lives
. In that essay, I would like to discuss both views in that context.

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first
and foremost, Actually
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government
have
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lots
of responsibility about their nations'
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lives
.

Due to that, controlling systems of the
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country
should have
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consider about the
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people
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who
do not have the similar
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potential
than
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other
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people
.
For example
,
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Sri lanka
is
still
developing
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country
which have high population. In fact, there are
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lots
of
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people
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who
don't have proper
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wealth
to continue their tasks,
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but
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srilankan
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people
have
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a
best educational backgrounds,
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because
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sri
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lankan
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government
has
been made
the educational similarity for all the
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people
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who
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lived
in the
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country
whether they are rich or poor. Not
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only
that
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but
also
, they provide primary and secondary education without any charges.
Moreover
, every person can
be received
free education. Actually, these
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kind
of methods create most valuable opportunities to poor nations
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who
do not have proper
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wealth
to continue their studies without any
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stress
.

In addition
to these, according to the humanity,
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richest
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people
can
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help
to
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poorests
to success their
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lives
journey during their
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hard
time period. In fact, providing facilities is one of the most impressive
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help
which is useful to reconstruct the
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poorests
' failures.
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;
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somalia
is one of the poorest
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country
which do not
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have best
economical background.
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Therefore
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some
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other
rich
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countries
donate resources and service to
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somalian
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people
to continue their
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lives
. Such as, food donations, health and educational resources including others facilities
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and etc
. These
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kinds
of phenomenon create
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strobg
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connection between
the two stages of
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people
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who
are
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lived
in the same
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country
. And
also
it
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helps
to refurbish the poor system in the country.

In conclusion
,
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government
should have
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some
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kind
of responsibility about their citizens
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who
are suffered
from the life struggle.
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overall
, all they
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people
should
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consider about the
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eachothers
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who
are
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lived
in same
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country
and
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who
do not have strong
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wealth
.
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IELTS essay should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among the poor nations by providing such things as food and education or is it the responsibility of the government of poor nations to look after their citizens themselves.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
419 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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