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some people believe that non-academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that teaching non academic topic ought to be replaced from the syllabus while youngster can focus only on one an academics. I completely disagree with aforementioned statements because reading new sources leads to get extra experience and knowledge. Firstly, I think that, having extra subject matter helps for children which provides general information and make them active. Also, students are likely to be more confidence at any subjects at school. If there are exhibition class, it will help out for teenger to handle situations. Teaching extra activities at ealy age, people can learnt new source and words easily, people can learnt new source and words easily. Moreover, education administration had better to include sports education to their child which promote nation identity. Scholar can show their creative, skill and technique owing of this type of education. For example, if government provides amenities of painting, artwork than children will express their emotions, feeling through arts. Nevertheless, concentrating in one subjects leads to psychology affect to the children. Likewise, students are supposed to follow their passion which make them amiable and happy. Having only a subjects will not useful unless children can give time to that subjects. If adosclent are aware about what they want to be in future, they will get their routine what ought t be done. Recent survey The Times has found that 50% of postgradute are in mental pressure because they are not likely to understand one topics. So, parents also be aware about their young child what type of education does he or she needed. In conclusion, I think that teaching new academics will boost power of children whereas having one subjects leads more pressure in students. Although studying non subjects education is waste of time, children can be learnt extra activities.
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that teaching
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non academic
topic ought to
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from the syllabus while youngster can focus
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only
on one an academics. I completely disagree with aforementioned statements
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because
reading
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new
sources leads to
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get
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extra
experience and knowledge.

Firstly
, I
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think
that, having
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extra
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subject matter
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helps
for
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children
which provides general information and
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make
them active.
Also
, students are likely to be more confidence at any
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subjects
at school. If there are exhibition
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class
, it will
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help
out for
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teenger
to handle situations. Teaching
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extra
activities at
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ealy
age,
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people
can
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learnt
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new
source and words
easily
,
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people
can
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learnt
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new
source and words
easily
.
Moreover
,
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education
administration had better to include sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
to their child which promote nation identity. Scholar can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their creative,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
and technique owing of this type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
.
For example
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
provides amenities of painting, artwork than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will express their emotions, feeling through arts.

Nevertheless
, concentrating in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
leads to psychology affect to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
Likewise
, students
are supposed
to follow their passion which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them amiable and happy. Having
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
will not useful unless
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children
can give time to that
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subjects
. If
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adosclent
are aware about what they want to be
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
, they will
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get
their routine what ought t
be done
. Recent survey The Times has found that 50% of
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postgradute
are in mental pressure
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because
they are not likely to understand
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one topics
.
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So
, parents
also
be aware about their young child what type of
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education
does he or she needed.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that teaching
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new
academics will boost power of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
whereas having one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
leads more pressure in students. Although studying non
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is waste of time,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can be
Possible spelling mistake. 'learnt' is British English.
learnt
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extra
activities.
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IELTS essay some people believe that non-academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.

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