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Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternative ways to decrease crime. Discuss views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternative ways to decrease crime. Discuss views and give your opinion. BJl36
In the modern world, reducing crime level is becoming increasingly challenging among governments and communities. There is division among people as to whether it is better to impose lengthy jail sentences or apply other ways for bring criminal activities down. As well as offering my personal opinion, this essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to way both of such options can be efficient to tackle this issue. More than ever before, the death penalty, imprisonment and especially life sentence are society's more powerful ways to deter criminality. Put simply, such kinds of punishments can preserve the individuals, and as a result the society. For example, it is immoral for the state to kill its citizens. Hence, life imprisonment and the death penalty are essential for some crimes when serious misdeeds are committed, like murder. Furthermore, a longer sentence may even decrease reoffending rates, especially when serious repeat offenders are concerned. Statistically, evidence suggests that 32% would-be offenders have deterred felonies because of their fears of harsher sentencing and a doomed future. Overall, these people are in favour of this idea as small fines for the special type of crime do not act as much of a deterrent. On the other hand, such kinds of actions can be controlled to prevent crime by other alternatives. One solution way to reduce crime is counselling. Many criminals suffer from drug addiction, mental health problems and other societal issues. Whilethis is what leads them to commit crime in the first place, they can be counselled in terms of physically and mentally. Secondly, emphasis should be placed upon ealy education. Youth should be educated about the dengars of becoming a law breaker. Foe instance, they could be taken the prisons to meet with inmates who are serving life sentences. This would surly dissuade them from becoming criminals. in conclusion, this essay discussed the various reasons why people hold these points of view and whether longer staying in jail or other solutions stop people from carry out a crime.
In the modern world, reducing
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crime
level is becoming
increasingly
challenging among
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governments
and communities. There is division among
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people
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as to whether
it is better to impose lengthy jail
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sentences
or apply
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other
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ways
for bring criminal activities down.
As well
as offering my personal opinion, this essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to
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way
both of such options can be efficient to tackle this issue.

More than ever
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before
, the death penalty, imprisonment and
especially
life
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sentence
are society's more powerful
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ways
to deter criminality. Put
simply
, such kinds of punishments can preserve the individuals, and
as a result
the society.
For example
, it is immoral for the state to kill its citizens.
Hence
, life imprisonment and the death penalty are essential for
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some
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crimes
when serious misdeeds
are committed
, like murder.
Furthermore
, a longer
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sentence
may even decrease
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reoffending
rates,
especially
when serious repeat offenders
are concerned
.
Statistically
, evidence suggests that 32% would-be offenders have deterred felonies
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because
of their fears of harsher sentencing and a doomed future.
Overall
, these
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people
are in
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favour
of this
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idea
as
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small
fines for the special type of
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crime
do not act as much of a deterrent.

On the
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hand, such kinds of actions can
be controlled
to
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prevent
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crime
by
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alternatives. One solution
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way
to
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reduce
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crime
is counselling.
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Many
criminals suffer from drug addiction, mental health problems and
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other
societal issues.
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Whilethis
is what leads them to commit
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crime
in the
first
place, they can
be counselled
in terms of
physically
and mentally.
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, emphasis should
be placed
upon
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ealy
education. Youth should
be educated
about the
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dengars
of becoming a law breaker. Foe instance, they could
be taken
the prisons to
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meet
with inmates who are serving life
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. This would surly dissuade them from becoming criminals.

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in
conclusion, this essay discussed the various reasons why
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people
hold these points of view and whether longer staying in jail or
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other
solutions
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stop
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people
from carry out a
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crime
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternative ways to decrease crime. Discuss views and give your opinion.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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