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Some people believe that it’s not necessary to have internet access to live a full life. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience. v.1

Some people believe that it’s not necessary to have internet access to live a full life. What is your opinion? v. 1
In the past few decades, lifestyle has tremendously changed because of technological advancements. Internet, like many other important household things, has become an essential product in every home. However, some people argue that internet need not exist in our lives to live a purposeful life. I completely agree with this statement. This essay will discuss why internet is not a necessity to lead a meaningful life. Firstly, internet access does not always bring us joy that one looks forward to. It is certain that online access gives us information that we need and helps to complete our work in a more efficient manner. However, the internet does not redefine joy. Surprisingly, internet may not always provide joy a human being can bring. For instance, there are many grandparents who seek happiness by looking after their grandchildren. Some of them do not have internet access at homes, but they are content with lives by interacting with people they know. Hence, it is certain that being connected with the world via internet is not necessary all the time to live a peaceful life. Secondly, children in remote villages do not have the means to be connected with the world. Does this mean they are not leading a happy life? Even though they may not have the luxury of internet or other technological devices at home, they grow up to be children who seek happiness in other forms. They learn about the world through their surroundings. When they play with other young children, they learn to be more kind and compassionate. Without internet access, they become caring citizens and passionate learners who live a joy-filled life. In conclusion, interacting with human beings and learning from our environment bring more joy that internet does not provide all the time. Given this situation, we can all learn to live a completely meaningful life without depending on other devices for true happiness.
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because
of technological advancements. Internet, like
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other
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important
household things, has become an essential product in every home.
However
,
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some
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people
argue that internet need not exist in our
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lives
to
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a purposeful life. I completely
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agree
with this statement. This essay will discuss why internet is not a necessity to lead a meaningful life.

Firstly
, internet
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access
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does
not always bring us
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joy
that one looks forward to. It is certain that online
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access
gives us information that we need and
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helps
to complete our work in a more efficient manner.
However
, the internet
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does
not redefine
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joy
.
Surprisingly
, internet may not always provide
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joy
a human being can bring.
For instance
, there are
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many
grandparents who seek happiness by looking after their grandchildren.
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Some
of them do not have internet
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access
at homes,
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but
they are content with
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lives
by interacting with
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people
they know.
Hence
, it is certain that
being connected
with the world via internet is not necessary all the time to
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live
a peaceful life.

Secondly
, children in remote villages do not have the means to
be connected
with the world.
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Does
this mean they are not leading a happy life?
Even though
they may not have the luxury of internet or
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other
technological devices at home, they grow up to be children who seek happiness in
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other
forms. They learn about the world through their surroundings. When they play with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
young children, they learn to be more kind and compassionate. Without internet
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access
, they become caring citizens and passionate learners who
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live
a joy-filled life.

In conclusion
, interacting with human beings and learning from our environment bring more
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joy
that internet
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does
not provide all the time.
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Given
this situation, we can all learn to
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live
a completely meaningful life without depending on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
devices for true happiness.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it’s not necessary to have internet access to live a full life. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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