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*QUESTION* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v.1

*QUESTION* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 1
The family is the smallest unit of the society and its activities consequently affect the larger community. The trend of having a small-sized family is on the uprise around the globe now. This has some benefits such as easy management and proper planning, but it also has some drawbacks. On one hand, in a home with fewer individuals, it is far more convenient to cater for the needs of the family, such as feeding, clothing, housing and even school fees as opposed to families with more people. For example, with a monthly salary of N100, 000 in a family of 3, they can afford a comfortable house, buy food and clothing, and the child can attend a decent school. If there is an increase in the number of this family, extra income would be needed to achieve the same. In addition, making future plans can be done more smoothly as it is easier to account for people in modest groups than an extensive one. Likewise, smaller families tend to be more closely knit and share common goals. Monitoring of the whereabouts of each member of the family is also less stressful. On the other hand, a reduced number of children born into families mean that there will be less available manpower, leaving the government, as well as private companies with limited varieties of human resources to choose from. This can in turn result in a decline in the GDP of the country. Furthermore, from an interview conducted on individuals from small-scaled families, a majority of them seem to have had a boring home-life with little activities while growing up. Reports have shown that some people from very small homes tend to stay longer at work while others prefer to go to other hang out spots after work before they finally retire home for the day. In conclusion, even though having a small numbered family can make life boring and also reduce available human resources, it has some great benefits.
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family
is the smallest unit of the society and its activities
consequently
affect the larger community. The trend of having a
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small
-sized
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family
is on the uprise around the globe
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now
. This has
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some
benefits such as easy management and proper planning,
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but
it
also
has
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drawbacks.

On one hand, in a home with fewer individuals, it is far more convenient to cater for the needs of the
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family
, such as feeding, clothing, housing and even school fees as opposed to
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families
with more
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people
.
For example
, with a monthly salary of N100, 000 in a
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family
of 3, they can afford a comfortable
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house
,
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buy
food and clothing, and the child can attend a decent school. If there is an increase in the number of this
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family
, extra income would
be needed
to achieve the same.
In addition
, making future plans can
be done
more
smoothly
as it is easier to account for
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people
in modest groups than an extensive one.
Likewise
, smaller
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families
tend to be more
closely
knit and share common goals. Monitoring of the whereabouts of each member of the
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family
is
also
less stressful.

On the other hand
, a
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reduced
number of children born into
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families
mean that there will be less available manpower, leaving the
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government
,
as well
as private
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companies
with limited varieties of human resources to choose from. This can in turn result in a decline in the GDP of the country.
Furthermore
, from an interview conducted on individuals from
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small
-scaled
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, a majority of them seem to have had a boring home-life with
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little
activities while growing up. Reports have shown that
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some
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people
from
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very
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homes tend to stay longer at work while others prefer to go to other hang out spots after work
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before
they
finally
retire home for the day.

In conclusion
,
even though
having a
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small
numbered
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family
can
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make
life boring and
also
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reduce
available human resources, it has
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some
great benefits.
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IELTS essay *QUESTION* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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