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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos. Why?

Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos. Why? ldM2X
In this modern world, perspectives of how to keep animals are varied between people. Some people think about caging them in zoos or forests while others think it is illogical to limit animals’ movements. People have different views on animal welfare. To begin with, the trend of keeping animals in zoos has some drawbacks. The main drawback of these is that when they move to wildlife animals can lose their instinct to hunt or fight and this can have adverse effects on the animals. In addition, there are several organizations that focus on profit rather than animal welfare. For example, in order to attract more people and increase their profit, they try to catch rare animals and bring them in the cage. In conclusion, keeping animals in zoos is not correct, but it should be done in a suitable and scientific manner to bring the best benefits to people and animals.
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to wildlife
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can lose their instinct to hunt or fight and this can have adverse effects on the
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animals
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, there are several organizations that focus on profit
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animal
welfare.
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people
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animals
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos. Why?

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  American English
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151 words
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