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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of the government to transport their children to schools. Others say it is the responsibility of the parents to get their children to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of the government to transport their children to schools. Others say it is the responsibility of the parents to get their children to school. Wyq2k
Picking or dropping children from home to school or viewers should be by public sector or by their parents is a matter of debate in these days. In my opinion it ought to be the responsibility of immediate parents rather than the government authorities. However this essay is going to detail both of the views. To begin with, public sector owns the transportation from ages. That means, since the ancient time, right from the beginning of motor vehicles and long buses, all the expenses were borne by this sector because of the limited resources in the hands of private sector. Also, people pay the part of their income to the government in the form of taxes and in exchange they demand common transport facilities for them and for their children. Furthermore, right to education for children may require an easy to and fro travel to school to home, that is possible with the help of ample money collectors and that again possible by the sectors which has maximum resources and that is public sector. One survey report is important to mention here, where the Punjab transport department found 60% parents required from the state to be taken their children from school to home by public sector vehicles. On the flip side, guardians in modern era, find poor safety measures in public sector transportations. They like to carry their children by their personal means. That can also be the reason to stay connected with their wards for the maximum time however would not be possible due to their hasty and monotonous life. Also, with the induction of many short courses in good parenting, people learn the value of spending time with their kids and the benefits to escort them till school by their own. For example, if a father drops his son or daughter till the doorstep of school, he may take an eye on the uniform standard and other quality measures related to studies while sitting in car or accompanying in the private transport they use. In conclusion, therefore I believe that leaving a ward to school by parents brings many benefits that may not be possible if/she is sent to the public transport.
Picking or dropping
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children
from home to
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school
or viewers should be by
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public
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sector
or by their
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parents
is a matter of debate in these days. In my opinion it ought to be the responsibility of immediate
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parents
rather
than the
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government
authorities.
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However
this essay is going to detail both of the views.

To
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begin
with,
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public
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sector
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owns
the transportation from ages. That means, since the ancient time, right from the beginning of motor vehicles and long buses, all the expenses
were borne
by this
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sector
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because
of the limited resources in the hands of private
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sector
.
Also
,
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people
pay the part of their income to the
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government
in the form of taxes and in exchange they demand common
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transport
facilities for them and for their
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children
.
Furthermore
, right to education for
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children
may require an easy to and fro travel to
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school
to home,
that is
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possible
with the
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help
of ample money collectors and that again
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possible
by the
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sectors
which has maximum resources and
that is
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public
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sector
. One survey report is
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important
to mention here, where the Punjab
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transport
department found 60%
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parents
required from the state to
be taken
their
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children
from
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school
to home by
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public
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sector
vehicles.

On the flip side, guardians in modern era, find poor safety measures in
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public
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sector
transportations. They like to carry their
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children
by their personal means. That can
also
be the reason to stay connected with their wards for the maximum time
however
would not be
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possible
due to their hasty and monotonous life.
Also
, with the induction of
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many
short courses in
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good
parenting,
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people
learn the value of spending time with their kids and the benefits to escort them till
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school
by their
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own
.
For example
, if a father drops his son or daughter till the doorstep of
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school
, he may take an eye on the uniform standard and other quality measures related to studies while sitting in car or accompanying in the private
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transport
they
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use
.

In conclusion
,
therefore
I believe that leaving a ward to
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school
by
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parents
brings
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many
benefits that may not be
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possible
if/she is
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sent
to the
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public
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transport
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is the responsibility of the government to transport their children to schools. Others say it is the responsibility of the parents to get their children to school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.5
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