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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. eWax
A sound body is a sound mind. A few people were more fitness conscious and will take care of their lifestyle by themselves, whereas, on other hand, the health of the citizen must be taken care by the government, believed some set of people. In my perspective, individual should indulge themselves to take care of their own well-being and nourishment. This essay delineates the different mindset of the people towards their health and diet. Health ministry shall implement a beneficial schemes which can improve their citizens fitness and food. Especially for the people under poverty line, as well as, the pregnant women's. In my opinion, the both needs a proper meal plan and fitness advice from the specialist. Government schemes for pregnant women, to illustrate this, in countries like Indian, Srilanka and some Asian countries includes nutritious food in monthly ration, as a result it will improve the growth of the baby health during the pregnancy period. Nevertheless, this is just the one side of the people view about the health and diet. Humans who had a less glimpse on their own fitness have chances to get affected by diabetics. Tom Riddle a famous nutritionist said, that people between age 19-25 have high chances to get affected by the diabetics, due to the fact of their limited physical activities and poor diet plans. For an example, an IT employee who had been in sedentary lifestyle over a period of time will have high chance to get diabetics, along with, aches and pains in the muscle. In the consequence, everyone should do some simple exercises to improve the health, besides, avoid fast food, instead, eat food which can be high in protein, mineral, and, vitamins for a sound meal table. To conclude, there are few exceptions where government must implement schemes to look after the citizens health and diet, despite people must include a few physical activities on day-to-day activities and practice proper diet to live fit and healthy.
A sound body is a sound mind. A few
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were more
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conscious and will take care of their lifestyle by themselves, whereas, on other hand, the
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health
of the citizen
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must
be taken
care by the
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government
, believed
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some
set of
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people
. In my perspective, individual should indulge themselves to take care of their
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own
well-being and nourishment. This essay delineates the
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different
mindset of the
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people
towards their
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health
and diet.

Health ministry shall implement a beneficial
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schemes
which can
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improve
their citizens
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fitness
and
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food
.
Especially
for the
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people
under poverty line,
as well
as, the pregnant women's. In my opinion, the both needs a proper meal plan and
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fitness
advice from the specialist.
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Government
schemes for pregnant women, to illustrate this, in countries like Indian,
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Srilanka
and
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some
Asian countries includes nutritious
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food
in monthly ration,
as a result
it will
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improve
the growth of the baby
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health
during the pregnancy period.
Nevertheless
, this is
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just
the one side of the
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people
view about the
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health
and diet.

Humans who had a less glimpse on their
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own
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fitness
have chances to
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get
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affected
by diabetics. Tom Riddle a
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famous
nutritionist said, that
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people
between age 19-25 have high chances to
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get
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affected
by the diabetics, due to the fact of their limited physical activities and poor diet plans. For an example, an IT employee who had been in sedentary lifestyle over a period of time will have high chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
diabetics, along with, aches and pains in the muscle. In the consequence, everyone should do
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some
simple exercises to
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improve
the
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health
,
besides
, avoid
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fast
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food
,
instead
, eat
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food
which can be high in protein, mineral, and, vitamins for a sound meal table.

To conclude
, there are few exceptions where
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government
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must
implement schemes to look after the citizens
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health
and diet, despite
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people
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must
include a few physical activities on day-to-day activities and practice proper diet to
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live
fit and healthy.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

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