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Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? LyPG
It is generally accepted by a plethora of people around the world that schools are the basic foundation to learn innovative things and they are an imperative part of everyone's life, which aids us to build our professional and personal growth. It is often claimed that the knowledge to deal with financial management must be an incumbent component, that should be taught to children since childhood in schools. I profoundly agree that children should be aware of managing financial conditions since school life. It assists them to understand the value of money and help them to spend money appropriately. For instance, in today's world, it is often noticed that many children waste a lot of their parents earning in hangouts with friends and partying at eminent restaurants every week without giving a second thought. Additionally, this subject will guide them in future to foresee the crisis which may be aroused due to the scarcity of money. Moreover, it brings maturity in a person since childhood to deal with financial imbalance and issues. Hence, embarking money without wasting. Further, schools should give them practical knowledge to comprehend the value of money in life. To illustrate, the learning centres should arrange an activity among students and reward them at the end of the month according to their savings. This will inculcate a habit of saving among them. Furthermore, this can bring a tremendous change in children's life since childhood. On the contrary, it also has some limitations. Children will be prone to stress since childhood and affect their mentality. For example, they start pondering to conserve money. To conclude, the cons of teaching financial management to children in organizations are comparatively more than its pros. This will have a prodigious impact on the life of children to live a peaceful and stable life in future.
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around the world that schools are the basic foundation to learn innovative
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, which aids us to build our professional and personal growth. It is
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often
claimed that the knowledge to deal with
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financial
management
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must
be an incumbent component, that should
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children
since childhood in schools.

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children
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financial
conditions since school
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life
. It assists them to understand the value of
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money
and
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help
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money
appropriately
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today
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children
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a lot of
their parents earning in hangouts with friends and partying at eminent restaurants every week without giving a second
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Additionally
, this subject will guide them in future to foresee the crisis which may
be aroused
due to the scarcity of
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money
.
Moreover
, it brings maturity in a person since childhood to deal with
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financial
imbalance and issues.
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, embarking
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money
without wasting.
Further
, schools should give them practical knowledge to comprehend the value of
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money
in
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life
. To illustrate, the learning
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centres
should arrange an activity among students and reward them at the
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end
of the month according to their savings. This will inculcate a habit of saving among them.
Furthermore
, this can bring a tremendous
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change
in children's
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life
since childhood.

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also
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some
limitations.
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will be prone to
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stress
since childhood and affect their mentality.
For example
, they
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start
pondering to conserve money.

To conclude
, the cons of teaching
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financial
management to
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children
in organizations are
comparatively
more than its pros. This will have a prodigious impact on the
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life
of
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children
to
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live
a peaceful and stable
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life
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IELTS essay Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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