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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. G6mj
Taking care of health is essential to enjoy life at fullest. Some people argue that individuals are accountable for their well-being, while others claim that it is government's responsibility to keep its citizens healthy. In this essay, both these assertions will be discussed. On the one hand, people who believe that it is the responsibility of a person to take care of his well-being because of two main reasons. One of them is that as everyone's health is different, one knows exactly what is good for him and what is not. Whether eating junk food is properly digested or it creates problems of acidity. Another reason is that stress, which is a major contributor to illness, can only be controlled by a person by not thinking much of the problem. For example, according to a research, it was concluded that a person can overcome stress only when he is determined to stay happy. On the other hand, there are people who believe that It is only government, which can make its residents healthy. Firstly, by taxing unhealthy products. This initiative would not only make unhealthy goods expensive to consume, but would also discourage manufacturers to produce them. Secondly, the authorities can completely prohibit production and selling of some items, which are hazardous for one's fitness. For instance, smoking is injurious to health, which is clearly mentioned on tobacco products, in spite of such warnings, people smoke cigarettes because it is easily available on shelves. The Government can ban such products from selling in markets, this step will make sure that people are unable to buy those products and stay fit. In conclusion, People can take care of their own fitness by making sure that only such food is consumed, which is healthy and suitable to its body, and stay happy by not taking any kind of stress. However, governments can also take actions to keep its citizens healthy, which includes levying taxes and imposing a ban on productions and selling of unhealthy products.
Taking care of health is essential to enjoy life at fullest.
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Some
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argue that individuals are accountable for their well-being, while others claim that it is
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government
's responsibility to
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keep
its citizens
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healthy
. In this essay, both these assertions will
be discussed
.

On the one hand,
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people
who believe that it is the responsibility of a person to take care of his well-being
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because
of two main reasons. One of them is that as everyone's health is
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different
, one knows exactly what is
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good
for him and what is not. Whether eating junk food is
properly
digested or it creates problems of acidity. Another reason is that
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stress
, which is a major contributor to illness, can
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only
be controlled
by a person by not thinking much of the problem.
For example
, according to a research, it
was concluded
that a person can overcome
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stress
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only
when he
is determined
to stay happy.

On the other hand
, there are
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people
who believe that It is
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only
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government
, which can
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make
its residents
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healthy
.
Firstly
, by taxing unhealthy
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products
. This initiative would not
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only
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make
unhealthy
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goods
expensive to consume,
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but
would
also
discourage manufacturers to produce them.
Secondly
, the authorities can completely prohibit production and selling of
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some
items, which are hazardous for one's fitness.
For instance
, smoking is injurious to health, which is
clearly
mentioned on tobacco
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products
,
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in spite of
such warnings,
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people
smoke cigarettes
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because
it is
easily
available on shelves. The
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Government
can ban such
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products
from selling in markets, this step will
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make
sure that
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people
are unable to
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buy
those
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products
and stay fit.

In conclusion
,
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People
can take care of their
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own
fitness by making sure that
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only
such food
is consumed
, which is
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healthy
and suitable to its body, and stay happy by not taking any kind of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
.
However
,
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governments
can
also
take actions to
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keep
its citizens
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healthy
, which includes levying taxes and imposing a ban on productions and selling of unhealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

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