Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that it is important for children to attend extra classes outside or after the schools while other disagree. Discuss both the views.

Some people believe that it is important for children to attend extra classes outside or after the schools while other disagree. QKQbP
Nowadays competition between people is increasing. Some individuals think that, by learning extra after the school in tuition, student can improve their knowledge regarding studies although others disagree with them. This essay intends to discuss both the view points in the ensuing paragraph. To begin with, many students attempt the extra classes after the school for effective learning and doubt clearing with the tuition teacher. First of all, children join the tuition classes to gain in depth knowledge of particular topic for better preparation for the academic challenges in the school at the end of their semester. Learning more can help to improve the score of student in their competitive examinations. Another reason of outside classes is doubt clearing, where the children can bring the quarries from the school or from their studies, the tutor solve doubts to clear their minds. To be precise, specific subjects which are tough for students where they need more attention, the tuition provide effective learning experience in such situation. However, after coming from school, there are other things in the society to explore rather than take pressure of studies. One of the important things is to explore other fields for example; dance, art, sports, music and other. This area can help the children to though out the stress of studies and feel free from it. Moreover, children can pick one area which ever they like by the exploration and they improve their skill in it, by doing so, they can become famous person. Lastly, student feel more pressure in their life after joining tuition, there for many people disagree with this view, here, many students suffer from stressful life and they feel under pressure. To conclude, many parents send their children in extra classes to cop up with other top students where they gain in depth knowledge and clear their doubts also, though other disagree with this because student have to explore other area rather than being stressful by attempting further classes
Nowadays competition between
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
is
increasing.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that, by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
extra after the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
in tuition,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their knowledge regarding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
although others disagree with them. This essay intends to discuss both the view points in the ensuing paragraph.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
attempt the extra
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
after the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
for effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doubt
clearing with the tuition teacher.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the tuition
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
to gain in depth knowledge of particular topic for better preparation for the academic challenges in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of their semester.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Learning
more can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the score of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
in their competitive examinations. Another reason of outside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doubt
clearing, where the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can bring the quarries from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
or from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
, the tutor solve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doubts
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
their minds. To be precise, specific subjects which are tough for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
where they need more attention, the tuition provide effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
experience in such situation.

However
, after coming from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
things in the society to explore
rather
than take pressure of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
. One of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
things is to explore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
fields
for example
; dance, art, sports, music and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
. This area can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to though out the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
and feel free from it.
Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can pick one area which ever they like by the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
exploration and
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
in it, by doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, they can become
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
person.
Lastly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
feel more pressure in their life after joining tuition, there for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
disagree with this view, here,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
suffer from stressful
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
life and
they feel under pressure.

To conclude
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in extra
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
to cop up with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
top
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
where they gain in depth knowledge and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doubts
also
, though
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
disagree with this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
explore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
area
rather
than being stressful by attempting
further
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is important for children to attend extra classes outside or after the schools while other disagree.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts