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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be share freely. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by some that sharing as much information in academic, scientific and business world is good, while there are others who think some information is very important or confidential to be shared with everyone. In my view sharing new information with public is good to keep them update in the world while sharing all kind of information with common individuals is not acceptable. On the one hand, many think that information regarding scientific research, business world and kind of academic nature should be shared so that people and communities will updated with the new development. For example, if there is a new research arrives in health sector, it should be shared globally to aware people and make addition in their knowledge. On the other hand, sharing all type of important details and information with everyone is make negative effects and adverse outcomes due to some security reasons. For instance, there is highly private and non-public information in all government and non-government organizations which are not public and not allowed to share with unauthorized persons. To my way of thinking, I opposed that sharing information regarding latest researches and world development with people is right and also beneficial for them in enhancing their knowledge of world. In contrast secret information of work places, laborites and educational areas should be kept personal. In conclusion, getting informed with the new and modern world or ear is appreciable but not all information is for everyone.
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important
or confidential to
be shared
with everyone. In my view
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sharing
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new
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information
with public is
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good
to
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keep
them update in the
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world
while
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sharing
all kind of
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information
with common individuals is not acceptable.

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think
that
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information
regarding scientific research, business
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world
and kind of academic nature should
be shared
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so
that
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people
and communities will updated with the
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new
development.
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, if there is a
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new
research arrives in health sector, it should
be shared
globally to aware
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people
and
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make
addition in their knowledge.

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,
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sharing
all type of
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important
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details
and
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information
with everyone is
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make
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negative
effects and adverse outcomes due to
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some
security reasons.
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, there is
highly
private and non-public
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information
in all
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government
and non-
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government
organizations which are not public and not
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allowed
to share with unauthorized persons.

To my way of thinking, I opposed that
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sharing
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information
regarding
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latest
researches and
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world
development with
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people
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is
right and
also
beneficial for them in enhancing their knowledge of
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world
. In
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contrast
secret
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information
of work places,
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laborites
and educational areas should be
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kept
personal.

In conclusion
, getting informed with the
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new
and modern
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world
or ear is appreciable
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but
not all
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information
is for everyone.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be share freely.

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