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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research business and academic world Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely 1
While managers used to work as long as they were alive, the recent decades have seen a rise in the number of senior employees, which has retired in the middle-age. It seems that enterprises are trying to motivate senior managers to step down in order to provide space for educated young people. Few people feel that humans can continue to function as long as they feel they have enough power to perform their assigned tasks. The experience they have gained over the years is a treasure trove and very valuable. These experiences can be very helpful to the body corporate in critical time. There are some middle-aged people who are very energetic and dynamic in their performance. These people are very passionate about their job and love it. Older people are significantly more mature in comparison of young people, and do not react emotionally to their decisions. With their experience, they can provide a calm, stress-free job environment for employees and greatly ameliorate the company's productivity, while young people do not have the peace and quiet needed to make peace in the company environment and are often arrogant and stubborn. These are not good features for managing people at any level of the firm. Many people reckon that each of these senior employees can nurture many young people and pass on their cherished experiences to them. This will train a lot of valuable people, which will be very useful and effective for the unity. In addition, the experiences of these employees, who is gradually getting older, will be well-preserved and will remain in the society. By training such young people, the future of the association is guaranteed, and these middle-aged people can retire safely. Of course, there are many educated young people who are highly skilled in their field of study and, despite their youth, are more experienced and useful than many older managers. Not only do the presence of these managers in the job position after the age of 55 has no advantage for the corporation, but it also prevents the possibility of these young people entering the field of work. It appears undertakings are attempting to propel senior supervisors to step down in arranging to supply space for teaching youthful individuals.
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managers
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used
to work as long as they were alive, the recent decades have
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seen
a rise in the number of
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senior
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employees
, which has retired in the middle-age. It seems that enterprises are trying to motivate
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senior
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managers
to step down in order to provide space for educated
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young
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people
.

Few
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people
feel that humans can continue to function as long as they feel they have
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enough
power to perform their assigned tasks. The
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experience
they have gained over the years is a treasure trove and
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very
valuable. These
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experiences
can be
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very
helpful to the body corporate in critical time. There are
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some
middle-aged
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people
who are
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very
energetic and dynamic in their performance. These
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people
are
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very
passionate about their job and
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love
it. Older
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people
are
significantly
more mature
in comparison
of
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young
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people
, and do not react
emotionally
to their decisions. With their
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experience
, they can provide a calm,
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stress
-free job environment for
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employees
and
greatly
ameliorate the
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company
's productivity, while
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young
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people
do not have the peace and quiet needed to
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make
peace in the
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company
environment and are
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often
arrogant and stubborn. These are not
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good
features for managing
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people
at any level of the firm.

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Many
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people
reckon that each of these
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senior
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employees
can nurture
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many
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young
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people
and pass on their cherished
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experiences
to them. This will train
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a lot of
valuable
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people
, which will be
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very
useful and effective for the unity.
In addition
, the
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experiences
of these
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employees
, who is
gradually
getting older, will be well-preserved and will remain in the society. By training such
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young
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people
, the future of the association
is guaranteed
, and these middle-aged
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people
can retire
safely
.
Of course
, there are
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many
educated
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young
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people
who are
highly
skilled in their field of study and, despite their youth, are more experienced and useful than
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many
older
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managers
. Not
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only
do the presence of these
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managers
in the job position after the age of 55 has no advantage for the corporation,
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but
it
also
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prevents
the possibility of these
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young
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people
entering the field of work.

It appears undertakings are attempting to propel
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senior
supervisors to step down in arranging to supply space for teaching youthful individuals.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research business and academic world Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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