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Some people believe that it is better to live or work in a Vertical City as compared to a horizontal City discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people believe that it is better to live or work in a Vertical City as compared to a horizontal City discuss both views and give your own opinion p1dOd
In contemporary Era it is argued that few individuals think that it is better when people live or work in a high rise building in a city instead of horizontal building city I will discuss both views and give my own opinion on the one hand there are people Thora benefits if individuals stay in vertical building first and formast, due to Rapid urbanization it require a less space of buildings in slot of flats make on tall building for instance in America there are many vertical building that's why they save their space and land for other activities such as swimming pool canteen and so on. Secondly, these type of tall building built with latest design and technology. Moreover, there are lot of other facilities available in developed area since masses not only require house for live or work but also require a hospital, parks and so on near in building. Thirdly, skyscrapers create a less noise pollution instead of horizontal city. some people like a peaceful environment and they do not disturb in their work. in addition, high rise buildings is secure for individual because there are many security guard and cctv install in tall building which is benefits for local masses. On the other hand, it brings a lot of advantages. If people live in horizontal building. In case of emergency they can easily go out their houses for example fire, earthquake. They can live in individual houses which is good for single family. hence more and more masses stay in small building. Further more, people live in individual house and the quality of life is better as compared to high rise building. People can enjoy more privacy and they keep parking space and personal gate according to their interest. In conclusion, despite this the benefits of a horizontal city is more as compared to vertical building. Growing population has made more high building.
In contemporary Era it
is argued
that few
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individuals
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think
that it is better when
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people
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live
or work in a
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high
rise
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building
in a city
instead
of horizontal
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building
city I will discuss both views and give my
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own
opinion on the one hand there are
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people
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Thora
benefits if
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individuals
stay in vertical
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building
first
and
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formast
, due to Rapid urbanization it
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require
a less space of
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buildings
in slot of flats
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make
on tall
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building
for instance
in America there are
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many
vertical
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building
that's why they save their space and land for other activities such as swimming pool canteen and
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so
on.
Secondly
, these type of tall
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building
built with
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latest
design and technology.
Moreover
, there are
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lot of
other facilities available in developed area since masses not
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only
require
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house
for
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live
or work
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but
also
require a hospital, parks and
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so
on near in
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building
.
Thirdly
, skyscrapers create a less noise pollution
instead
of horizontal city.
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some
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people
like a peaceful
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environment and
they do not disturb in their work.
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in
addition,
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high
rise
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buildings
is secure for
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individual
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because
there are
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many
security guard and
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cctv
install in tall
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building
which is benefits for local masses.
On the other hand
, it brings
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a lot of
advantages.
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If
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people
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live
in horizontal
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building
. In case of emergency they can
easily
go out their
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houses
for example
fire, earthquake. They can
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live
in
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individual
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houses
which is
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good
for single family.
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hence
more and more masses stay in
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small
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building
.
Further
more,
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people
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live
in
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individual
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house
and the quality of life is better
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as
compared to
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high
rise
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building
.
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People
can enjoy more
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privacy and
they
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keep
parking space and personal gate according to their interest.
In conclusion
, despite this the benefits of a horizontal city is more
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as
compared to vertical
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building
. Growing population has made more
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high
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building
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better to live or work in a Vertical City as compared to a horizontal City discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
317 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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