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Some people believe that it is better livinig in a vertial city , as compared to horizont city . What extent do you agree or disagree ?

Some people believe that it is better livinig in a vertial city, as compared to horizont city. What extent m2ajn
It is true that many people prefer to reside and work in a vertical city, as compared to horizontal city. I would argue that high rise buildings have more benefits than the parallel one. One the one hand, it is better to live in horizontal city as people have to pay less for building maintenance. if people have their own private home, they may spent less money. Moreover, people living on ground surface are more safer than who lives in tall buildings for instance, in case of some emergencies, fire or any disaster circumstances then can escape easily as building is not so high. Apart from this the owner of home has his own rights, he can modify his home according to his desire. However, the prices of home were bit pricey, one should not afford to buy it easily; and need to clean home and garden daily else it will create dirt. On the other hand, I believe living in vertical city is best choice in modern days. A city with high rise building have more space for government usage as less land will be used for creating taller buildings; the government would get enough space to build hospitals, schools or any other crucial places. Furthermore, people who stays in tall building gets good services such as security check at gate, nearby amenities, schools, malls. Even though there are some drawbacks, like maintenance of elevators, club house, children play garden apart from this fight for parking; I would prefer vertical city of choice especially for work purpose is more convenient than horizontal one. In conclusion, though living in horizontal city have benefits, there are many advantages of life in a city with tall buildings which makes our life better.
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prefer to reside and work in a vertical city, as compared to horizontal city. I would argue that high rise
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buildings
have more benefits than the parallel one.

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the one hand, it is better to
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live
in horizontal city as
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people
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have to
pay less for
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building
maintenance.
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if
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people
have their
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own
private home, they may
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spent
less money.
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people
living on ground surface are
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more safer
than who
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lives
in tall
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buildings
for instance
, in case of
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emergencies, fire or any disaster circumstances then can escape
easily
as
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building
is not
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so
high.

Apart from this the owner of home has his
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own
rights, he can modify his home according to his desire.
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, the prices of home were
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bit
pricey, one should not afford to
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need
to clean home and garden daily else it will create dirt.

On the other hand
, I believe living in vertical city
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choice in modern days. A city with high rise
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building
have more space for
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government
usage as less land will be
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used
for creating taller
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buildings
; the
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government
would
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get
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enough
space to build hospitals, schools or any other crucial places.
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people
who
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stays
in tall
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building
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gets
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good
services such as security
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at gate, nearby amenities, schools, malls.
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there are
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drawbacks, like maintenance of elevators, club
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, children play garden apart from this fight for parking; I would prefer vertical city of choice
especially
for work purpose is more convenient than horizontal one.

In conclusion
, though living in horizontal city have benefits, there are
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many
advantages of life in a city with tall
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buildings
which
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makes
our life better.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better livinig in a vertial city, as compared to horizont city. What extent

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