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Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job for shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job for shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations P0jK
There are plethora of problematic circumstances in every individual's life. Financial condition and contended job play a crucial role for happiness, however when we do not have such amenities, there are chances to improve the situations. This essay will attempt to look at both views including with the conclusion. To start with, in today's life style the happiness has been obsoleted from everyone's life. This could be probably, due to the scarcity of money and our work. Whereas, unwanted work always leads to the stress in life. It is considered by many that, the second name of life is tension and bad circumstances. People believe that one should accept such situations and be in it. Nevertheless, many argue that life is all about struggle. Moreover, financial conditions could be improved and finding a dream job can get done. To examplify, one has always an option to fulfill the desire and get a contented life, in contrast to accept unwanted circumstances. In my outlook, we should always give a try in order to achieve planned objective whatsoever. Furthermore, life can be seen as the opportunity to better the situation which are not according to us. In a nutshell, accept bad situation is not a problem, however believing in improvement is something what makes you a live.
There are plethora of problematic circumstances in every individual's
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life
. Financial condition and contended job play a crucial role for happiness,
however
when we do not have such amenities, there are chances to
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improve
the
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situations
. This essay will attempt to look at both views including with the conclusion.

To
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start
with, in
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today
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life
style the happiness has
been obsoleted
from everyone's
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life
. This could be
probably
, due to the scarcity of money and our work.
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Whereas
, unwanted work always leads to the
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stress
in
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life
. It
is considered
by
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many
that, the second name of
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life
is tension and
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bad
circumstances.
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People
believe that one should accept such
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situations
and be in it.

Nevertheless
,
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many
argue that
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life
is all about struggle.
Moreover
, financial conditions could be
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improved
and finding a dream job can
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get
done. To
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examplify
, one has always an option to fulfill the desire and
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get
a contented
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life
,
in contrast
to accept unwanted circumstances.

In my outlook, we should always give a try in order to achieve planned objective whatsoever.
Furthermore
,
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life
can be
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seen
as the opportunity to better the
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situation
which are not according to us.

In a nutshell, accept
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bad
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situation
is not a problem,
however
believing in improvement is something what
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makes
you a
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live
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job for shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations

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