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Children over 15 years should be allowed to take their own decision without any interference from their parents? Do you agree or disagree.

Children over 15 years should be allowed to take their own decision without any interference from their parents? mxln
It is argued that children over fifteen years should have the freedom to take their decisions and parents should not interfere with that. This essay completely agrees with the notion because it can make them independent and mentally strong. Also, it will increase their confidence and they can be more successful in life. The primary reason why children should take their own decisions is that they can become mentally strong and they do not have to depend on others. In other words, children can learn from their mistakes and they will be able to face any situation in life. Therefore, they will think about the consequences before taking any decision and this will make them mentally stronger. For example, a study done by the Guardian in the year 2017, revealed that people who took their own decisions at an early age are 30% more mentally stronger than the others are. Another reason to consider is that their confidence level can rise and self- confident people are usually more successful in life. That is to say, if children choose their career by themselves and get success in their chosen field, they will become self-confident. As a result, they can excel in their career and can be successful in the future. For instance, Sachin Tendulkar chose cricket as his career at an early age, he scored his first century, when he was just 16 and this increases his confidence, and now he is one of the successful cricketers in the country. In conclusion, parents should not interfere with decision making for children who are above 15 because it can make them mentally strong and can boost up their confidence and they will become successful.
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and parents should not interfere with that. This

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them independent and
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strong.
Also
, it will increase their confidence

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and
they can be more
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successful
in life.

The primary reason why
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children
should take their
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own
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decisions
is that they can become
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mentally
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strong and
they do not
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have to
depend on others.
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,
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children
can learn from their
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mistakes and
they will be able to face any situation in life.
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, they will
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think
about the consequences
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before
taking any
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decision
and this

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will
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make
them
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mentally
stronger.
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people
who took their
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own
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decisions
at an early age are 30% more
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mentally
stronger than the others are.

Another reason to consider is that their confidence

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level
can rise and self- confident
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people
are
usually
more
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successful
in life. That
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is


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to
say, if
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children
choose their career by themselves and
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get
success in their chosen field, they will become self-confident.
As a result
, they can excel in their career and can be
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successful
in the future.
For instance
,
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Sachin
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Tendulkar
chose cricket as his career at an early age, he scored his
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first


century, when he was
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just
16 and this

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increases
his confidence, and
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now
he is one of the
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successful
cricketers in the country.

In conclusion
, parents should not interfere with
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decision making
for
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children
who are above 15
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because
it can
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make
them
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mentally
strong and can boost up their confidence

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and
they will become
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successful
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IELTS essay Children over 15 years should be allowed to take their own decision without any interference from their parents?

Essay
  American English
12 paragraphs
282 words
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