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Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible?

Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible? 95Pxw
Society has different opinions on who is the real culprit when someone commits any offence, whether is it person or his surroundings. As far as I am concerned, both are equally play their own role in this matter. The main two reasons of this terrible situation are unemployment and illiteracy, and this essay will support my views in following paragraphs. Regarding causes of criminal behaviour, the first and foremost is lack of employment opportunities. In other word, many unemployed youth engage illegal activities to earn money within a short span of time: committing theft, shopplifting, and murders. Another point is that poor education, which would make them unemployable even if the government had suffient number of jobs. Eventually, not only do these two factors worsen the existing rates, but it can increase this in an alarming rate; for instance, in India, where total crimes have been grown significanty as illiteracy and umployment are skyrocketed, so I firmly belive that these are the major reasons. Why I consider society and individuals is responsible for criminal activities as follows. One obvious justification is that if the communitty had given proper education and guidance to the offenders while they were at schools, they would not offeneded now. Similarly, every individual has moral obligation and capacity to understand what is right and wrong. Despite blaming the authority, the deliquents themselves need to introspect to realise their liability in this matter, and thus, role of sociaty and people also clear and evident.
Society has
different
opinions on who is the real culprit when someone commits any
offence
, whether is it person or his surroundings. As far as I
am concerned
, both are
equally
play
their
own
role in this matter. The main two reasons of this terrible situation are unemployment and illiteracy, and this essay will support my views in following paragraphs.

Regarding causes of criminal
behaviour
, the
first
and foremost is lack of employment opportunities. In other word,
many
unemployed youth engage illegal activities to earn money within a short span of time: committing theft,
shopplifting
, and murders. Another point is that poor education, which would
make
them unemployable even if the
government
had
suffient
number of jobs.
Eventually
, not
only
do these two factors worsen the existing rates,
but
it can increase this in an alarming rate;
for instance
, in India, where total crimes have
been grown
significanty
as illiteracy and
umployment
are skyrocketed
,
so
I
firmly
belive
that these are the major reasons.

Why I consider society and individuals is responsible for criminal activities as follows. One obvious justification is that if the
communitty
had
given
proper education and guidance to the offenders while they were at schools, they would not
offeneded
now
.
Similarly
, every individual has moral obligation and capacity to understand what is right and
wrong
. Despite blaming the authority, the
deliquents
themselves need to introspect to
realise
their liability in this matter, and
thus
, role of
sociaty
and
people
also
clear
and evident.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible?

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