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Some people believe that home made food is better for health.while, others considered fast food is easy and simple for people to eat.

Some people believe that home made food is better for health. while, others considered fast food is easy and simple for people to eat. 30Xnb
It is believe by a section of people that prepare food at home knowing the health benefits. while, others considered fast food is easy and simple for individuals to eat. It is a very controversial issue. citizens can be found on both sides of the argument with strong logics. So, in order to draw an appropiate conclusion, both these view need to be properly discuss. On the one hand, there are mane good reasons why some people believe that home made food is better for health. Firstly, families can save money by cooking and eating at home.
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by a section of
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people
that prepare food at home knowing the health benefits.
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while
, others considered
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fast
food is easy and simple for individuals to eat. It is a
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controversial issue.
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citizens
can
be found
on both sides of the argument with strong logics.
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So
, in order to draw an
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appropiate
conclusion, both these view need to be
properly
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.

On the one hand, there are mane
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good
reasons why
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believe that home made food is better for health.
Firstly
, families can save money by cooking and eating at home.

IELTS essay Some people believe that home made food is better for health. while, others considered fast food is easy and simple for people to eat.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
97 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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