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some people believe that, health care should recieve more money to the state. However, others feel that there are another more imprtant spheres which need more money from state budget. discuss both opinion and give your view.

some people believe that, health care should recieve more money to the state. However, others feel that there are another more imprtant spheres which need more money from state budget. 6xmbj
Many people are of the opinion that, the goverment take the responsibility of the citizen's health and provide free medical care, whereas, other people think that it is not essential to spend a lot of money on improving the health of the population. A health care system is a big important part of a country as it is a key factor for the developed countries. Firstly, a state that has both physically and mentally healthy citizens, the goverment will never need other citizens of thestate, and salaries paid by the state remain in the state. Secondly, in each country the Ministry of health provides financial support to it is employes, which helps to increase their educational potential. This will lead to an increase in the number of educated people. Uzbekistan, for example, there and a functional approach to allocate more money for health system. Providing, someone is seriously ill, there is certainly a need for strong doctors in abroad. An effective way to improve the current situation, it is necessary to provide training of young specialists to abroad. Finally, as a result, the health sector is enriched with educated staff. on the one hand, the goverments allocation of funds in this system also in some way inapproprite. For instance, educational sphere is essential and always need of support. In this reason, heads of state must simultaniously support healty and education. If goverments did help with these system, they would been an increase and the appropriations will also be justifield. in conclusion, i believe that increased financial support in health care, it could help to raise the quality of locally specialist and it provides a place for the population to be cured during illnesses that need to be treated.
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goverment
take the responsibility of the citizen's
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health
and
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provide
free medical care, whereas, other
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people
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that it is not essential to spend
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money on improving the
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health
of the population.

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system
is a
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big
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important
part of a country as it is a key factor for the
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developed countries
.
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, a
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state
that has both
physically
and mentally healthy citizens, the
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goverment
will never
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need
other citizens of
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thestate
, and salaries paid by the
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state
remain in the
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state
.
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, in each country the Ministry of
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health
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provides
financial
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support
to it is
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employes
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to increase their educational potential. This will lead to an increase in the number of educated
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people
. Uzbekistan,
for example
, there and a functional approach to allocate more money for
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health
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system
. Providing, someone is
seriously
ill, there is
certainly
a
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need
for strong doctors in abroad. An effective way to
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improve
the
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current
situation, it is necessary to
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provide
training of young specialists to abroad.
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,
as a result
, the
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health
sector
is enriched
with educated staff.

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goverments
allocation of funds in this
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system
also
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way
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, educational sphere is essential and always
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of
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. In this reason, heads of
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state
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support
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healty
and education. If
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goverments
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conclusion,
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believe that increased financial
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in
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health
care, it could
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help
to raise the quality of
locally
specialist and it
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provides
a place for the population to
be cured
during illnesses that
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need
to
be treated
.
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IELTS essay some people believe that, health care should recieve more money to the state. However, others feel that there are another more imprtant spheres which need more money from state budget.

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