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Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education

Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education 1OkW
Modern society, 99% of schools are preferred to have sports as their subject. In fact, some schools considered sports is a one of the core subjects having more weightage than academic papers. Perception towards the statement like to cover up the areas as below. Now a days government are providing special quota in school enrollment for those who are good in sports activities. Its well know fact that schools are meant to amplify the knowledge of juniors. Earlier trend was narrowed only for fundamental studies whereas current moved into wider aspects of sports and the weightage of sports carry 40% in the year end. The statement derives the areas where supporters and oppose on part. Some people have prejudice mind alleged to have sports in schools is really a waste of time. For instance, when I was into my school days were sports plays zero importance. In another words, fundamental subjects are pretty much to care about for future opportunities. I was more bludgeon to focus the fundamental subjects rather than spending time in sports. Parents in that era urges that carrying good marks in the subjects will only help to get better findings in future. On the other hand, while moved to college enrollment: - was enrolled followed by a friend who got less marks in school days than me because of sports quota. This lead to create a grudge feeling towards myself. Nevertheless, based on current competitive study sports make vital part to relieve stress of the students. Although sports man like Michael phil, Usain bolt are one of the living inspirations in the world. Capping up the statement, Meticulously I believe sports in schools are important to be considered…
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considered
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subjects
having more weightage than academic papers. Perception towards the statement like to cover up the areas as below.
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are providing special quota in
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school
enrollment for those who are
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good
in
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sports
activities. Its well know fact that
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schools
are meant
to amplify the knowledge of juniors. Earlier trend
was narrowed
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only
for fundamental studies whereas
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current
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moved
into wider aspects of
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sports
and the weightage of
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sports
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40% in the year
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in
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schools
is
really
a waste of time.
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, when I was into my
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school
days were
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sports
plays zero importance. In
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another words
, fundamental
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subjects
are pretty much to care about for future opportunities. I was more bludgeon to focus the fundamental
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subjects
rather
than spending time in
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sports
. Parents in that era urges that carrying
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good
marks in the
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subjects
will
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only
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help
to
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get
better findings
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in future
.

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, while
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moved
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was enrolled
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school
days than me
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of
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quota. This lead to create a grudge feeling towards myself.
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, based on
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current
competitive study
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sports
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make
vital part to relieve
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stress
of the students. Although
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sports
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man
like Michael
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phil
,
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Usain bolt
are one of the living inspirations in the world.

Capping up the statement,
Meticulously
I believe
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sports
in
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schools
are
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important
to
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IELTS essay Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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