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some people believe that having a one-world government is better than having a national government in each country. Do you agree or disagree?

some people believe that having a one-world government is better than having a national government in each country. 9ldo7
In each country, every single citizen has a right to choose the government by themselve. Some people argue that it is better to have one national government than having a country’s government. personally, I strongly disagree with the topic. I believe that each nation should have their own government. This essay will describe the two main benefits of having a national government before the conclusion is reached. the national government can understand the domestic issues by their familiarity. Most of the national authorities are from their citizen. They can obviously realise the problem in the country such as transportation, pollution, and medical. These issues are the main priority of every nation. Moreover, to solve these issues, it is better if the authorities must face with these difficulties before solving them. Therefore, having the domestic government will cause understanding of the situation better. Having domestic authorities cause the citizen to can contact the government and report their difficulty easily and comfortably. Once humankind faces with an issue that is the government responsibily. They can contact the related person rapidly. For example, If family members have emergency health issues, they can request medical services quickly. In addition, individuals can comfortably communicate with the government by using their native language. In conclusion, this essay has illustrated the advantages of having a domestic government. national issues can easily solve by the authorities understanding. Furthermore, each citizen can contact and report with the government easily. From my point of view, I believe that each nation should have their own government to solve public difficulty in an accessible way.
In each country, every single
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citizen
has a right to choose the
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government
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themselve
.
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people
argue that it is better to have one
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national
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government
than
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having
a country’s
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government
.
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personally
, I
strongly
disagree with the topic. I believe that each nation should have their
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own
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government
. This essay will
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describe
the two main benefits of
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having
a
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national
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government
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before
the conclusion
is reached
.

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the
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national
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government
can understand the
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domestic
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issues
by their familiarity. Most of the
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national
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authorities
are from their
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citizen
. They can
obviously
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realise
the problem in the country such as transportation, pollution, and medical. These
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issues
are the main priority of every nation.
Moreover
, to solve these
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issues
, it is better if the
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authorities
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must
face with these difficulties
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before
solving them.
Therefore
,
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having
the
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domestic
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government
will cause understanding of the situation better.

Having
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domestic
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authorities
cause the
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citizen
to can contact the
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government
and report their difficulty
easily
and
comfortably
.
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Once
humankind faces with an
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issue
that is
the
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government
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responsibily
. They can contact the related person
rapidly
.
For example
, If family members have emergency health
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issues
, they can request medical services
quickly
.
In addition
, individuals can
comfortably
communicate with the
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government
by using their native language.

In conclusion
, this essay has illustrated the advantages of
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having
a
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domestic
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government
.
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national
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issues
can
easily
solve by the
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authorities
understanding.
Furthermore
, each
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citizen
can contact and report with the
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government
easily
. From my point of view, I believe that each nation should have their
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own
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government
to solve public difficulty
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in an accessible way
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IELTS essay some people believe that having a one-world government is better than having a national government in each country.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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