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Some people believe that growing up in a large family, with several sisters and brothers, offers more advantages than disadvantages. Other people think that being the only child is more advantageous. which one do you prefer? why? v.2

Some people believe that growing up in a large family, with several sisters and brothers, offers more advantages than disadvantages. Other people think that being the only child is more advantageous. which one do you prefer? why? v. 2
There different kinds of families all around the world. Some people live alone without any relatives some others grow up in an extended family which includes a lot of people normally. It is important study the effect of family size in the quality of children’s lives. Each of these families has their especial advantages and disadvantages accordingly. I think this essay will give you a better understanding about each of family’s benefits and defects. A crucial point that you can only see in bigger families is the sense of group work and supporting that any member of a family has in his every action. Brothers and sisters help you when you are in trouble. You learn how to do most of the works you have not experienced yet from them. They can guide you with their experience through your difficult conditions when your parents do not have enough time for you or even your problem is something horrible in your mind which can not be told to your parents. Also, your brother and sisters can offer you a beneficial set of skills that can help you in your future life when you become older. You can practice plenty of actions with your brothers and sisters easily. However, there could be some difficulties too. For example, parents may pay less attention to you because they have to grow up a lot of kids. They may do not have time to listen to all of your wishes. The free space in your house can be a big issue, since there will be not enough room for all the family members and you must live with one or two of your brothers or sisters in a same room. Although little families seem to be popular these days because of financial and cultural issues, extended families still have their benefits which cannot be ignored in any case; like friendship, loyalty and intimacy. In conclusion, with all these advantages and dis advantages we should know that we can manage to get the best result from our situation regardless. We might face some difficulties at first but it will benefit us at the long run. In any case we must not forget one vital reality that I strongly recommend you to not forget and it is your parents love to you which cannot be altered or diminished in any kind of family that you have now.
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all around the world.
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people
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alone without any relatives
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others grow up in an extended
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family
which includes
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normally
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study the effect of
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size in the quality of children’s
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lives
. Each of these
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families
has their especial advantages and disadvantages
accordingly
. I
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think
this essay will give you a better understanding about each of
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family’s
benefits and defects.

A crucial point that you can
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in bigger
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families
is the sense of group work and supporting that any member of a
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family
has in his every action.
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Brothers
and
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sisters
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help
you when you are in trouble. You learn how to do most of the works you have not experienced
yet
from them. They can guide you with their experience through your difficult conditions when your parents do not have
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enough
time for you or even your problem is something horrible in your mind which can not be
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told
to your parents.

Also
, your
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brother
and
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sisters
can offer you a beneficial set of
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skills
that can
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help
you in your future life when you become older. You can practice
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plenty
of actions with your
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brothers
and
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sisters
easily
.
However
, there could be
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difficulties too.
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, parents may pay less attention to you
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they
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have to
grow up
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a lot of
kids. They may do not have time to listen to all of your wishes. The free space in your
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can be a
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big
issue, since there will be not
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enough
room for all the
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family
members and you
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must
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with one or two of your
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brothers
or
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sisters
in a same room.

Although
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little
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families
seem to be popular these days
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of financial and cultural issues, extended
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families
still
have their benefits which cannot be
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ignored
in any case; like friendship, loyalty and intimacy.

In conclusion
, with all these advantages and
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dis
advantages we should know that we can manage to
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get
the best result from our situation regardless. We might face
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some
difficulties at
first
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but
it will benefit us at the long run. In any case we
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must
not forget one vital reality that I
strongly
recommend you to not forget and it is your parents
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love
to you which cannot
be altered
or diminished in any kind of
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family
that you have
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now
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that growing up in a large family, with several sisters and brothers, offers more advantages than disadvantages. Other people think that being the only child is more advantageous. which one do you prefer? why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
400 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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