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Some people believe that governments should spend the majority of their transport budgets on rail transport, while others say this money should be used to build more roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that governments should spend the majority of their transport budgets on rail transport, while others say this money should be used to build more roads. BlaKp
It is clear that traffic congestion is a serious problem for most countries around the world, especially developing countries. There are people who say that the governments should spend the most of their transport budgets on rail transport. However, there are some others who think that this money should be paid for building more roads. This essay will discuss both sides as well as give my opinion. First of all, railways are believed to be invested by governments because that is one of the faster means of transport. Railways are suitable for people travelling long distances more easily. Furthermore, according to environmental problems such as traffic jams and air pollution, constructing rail transport is the best way to solve these issues due to railways eliminating less amount of carbon dioxide than other private vehicles such as cars and motorbikes. Therefore, governments should spend budgets upgrading railways not only for safer and fewer accidents but also for being environmentally-friendly. On the other hand, there are some reasons why building more roads and making the roads bigger are better alternative ways to reduce the issue of traffic nowadays. To begin with, existing roads are insufficient to provide the space for the increasing number of motorbikes and cars. In large cities, people usually commute to work by car, which may lead to a rise in traffic jams downtown. Therefore, roads should be built and extended to cope with traffic congestion. Secondly, roads are more convenient to compare with railways because people can go every time and they don’t have to travel to stations. Besides that, roads are easily built almost everywhere due to their connectivity. In conclusion, although building more roads is easier and economical, it seems to me that investing in railways is the better choice to reduce the amount of vehicles and environmental problems.
It is
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clear
that
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traffic
congestion is a serious problem for most countries around the world,
especially
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developing countries
. There are
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people
who say that the
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governments
should spend the most of their
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transport
budgets on rail
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transport
.
However
, there are
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some
others who
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that this money should
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for building more
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roads
. This essay will discuss both sides
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as well as
give my opinion.

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First of all
,
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railways
are believed
to
be invested
by
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governments
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because
that is
one of the faster means of
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transport
.
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Railways
are suitable for
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people
travelling long distances more
easily
.
Furthermore
, according to environmental problems such as
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traffic
jams and air pollution, constructing rail
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transport
is the best way to solve these issues due to
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railways
eliminating less amount of carbon dioxide than other private vehicles such as cars and motorbikes.
Therefore
,
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governments
should spend budgets upgrading
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railways
not
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only
for safer and fewer accidents
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but
also
for being
environmentally
-friendly.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
reasons why building more
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roads
and making the
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roads
bigger are better alternative ways to
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reduce
the issue of
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traffic
nowadays. To
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begin
with, existing
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roads
are insufficient to provide the space for the increasing number of motorbikes and cars. In large cities,
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people
usually
commute to work by car, which may lead to a rise in
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traffic
jams downtown.
Therefore
,
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roads
should
be built
and extended to cope with
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traffic
congestion.
Secondly
,
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roads
are more convenient to compare with
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railways
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because
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people
can go every
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time and
they don’t
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have to
travel to stations.
Besides
that,
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roads
are
easily
built almost everywhere due to their connectivity.

In conclusion
, although building more
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roads
is easier and economical, it seems to me that investing in
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railways
is the better choice to
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reduce
the amount of vehicles and environmental problems.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that governments should spend the majority of their transport budgets on rail transport, while others say this money should be used to build more roads.

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4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
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