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Some people believe that government should be responsible for the protection of the environment.To what extend do you agree?

Some people believe that government should be responsible for the protection of the environment. 2axYk
There is a notion that the protection of the environment is the sole duty of government and not that of the people. I completely agree with this openion and think that it is the principal duty of government to protect the environment. First of all, I believe that government have the power to implement the policy to reduce global warming, deforestation along with other issues. Common people cannot put up long term policy or effective environment protection methods. While in this modern era these citizens are the sailient reason for the destruction of the environment still by knowing it. The researches had proven that in the day to day life the most dangerous to the environment is plastic waste disposed into the nature by common people. Now government have strictly prohibited it using its power. That is why it is said that more important obligation of government to conserve nature than people. Secondly, using the power of government they can implement fines and punishments for any means of harm to the environment. In other words, people usually dispose the non decomposable waste directly into the nature because they don not have any restrictions on it. But when there is severe fines and punishments for such unfavourable act they will not repeat it. For instance, studies have proved that due to high end laws which stands out for the protection of nature, the trend to dispose waste in the surrounding have decrease significantly. Thus, government playing pivotal role in preserving environment is more beneficial in a higher perspective To conclude, i strongly believe that it is the major duty of government to protect the nature because it is more advanced and beneficial.
There is a notion that the protection of the
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environment
is the sole duty of
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government
and not that of the
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people
. I completely
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agree
with this
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openion
and
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think
that it is the principal duty of
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government
to protect the environment.

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First of all
, I believe that
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government
have the power to implement the policy to
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reduce
global warming, deforestation along with other issues. Common
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people
cannot put up long term policy or effective
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environment
protection methods. While in this modern era these citizens are the
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sailient
reason for the destruction of the
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environment
still
by knowing it. The researches had proven that in the
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day to day
life the most
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dangerous
to the
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environment
is plastic waste disposed into the
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nature
by common
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people
.
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Now
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government
have
strictly
prohibited it using its power.
That is
why it
is said
that more
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important
obligation of
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government
to conserve
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nature
than
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people
.

Secondly
, using the power of
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government
they can implement fines and punishments for any means of harm to the
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environment
.
In other words
,
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people
usually
dispose the
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non decomposable
waste
directly
into the
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nature
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because
they
Did you mean "do not"?
don not
have any restrictions on it.
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But
when
Did you mean "there are severe fines"?
there is severe fines
and punishments for such
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unfavourable
act they will not repeat it.
For instance
, studies have proved that due to high
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end
laws which stands out for the protection of
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nature
, the trend to dispose waste in the surrounding have decrease
significantly
.
Thus
,
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government
playing pivotal role in preserving
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environment
is more beneficial in a higher perspective

To conclude
,
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i
strongly
believe that it is the major duty of
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government
to protect the
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nature
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is more advanced and beneficial.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that government should be responsible for the protection of the environment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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