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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today's world growing number of people think that every country in world should be produce their food as independelly for their nation and over the world the food transaction needed to be stoped. From my point of view, I disagree with this idea due to following factors such as economic and weather factor on food crisis. Firstly, nutricient, proteins and different kind of vitamins are vital for human body both development phase and also physical health conditions. Main resouses for them are found in special type of foods which are grown in particular areas over the world. To cite an example most of fruit which suppilies vitamins C mainly rise in tropical areas and people who lives in for example northen county they don't have proper access to it. Hence it can't be rely on production in small homes or greenhomes to provide whole country with sufficient demand. Therefore, a country will have to rely on other nations for food commodities. On other hand, it has excessive impact on agriculture industry which is main soure of country's income in some part of world. In addition, scare resources can cause the increase in demand of food and as a result high price tag will be unavoidable solution. Following step would be imported food can only be accessible for above the middle class which is only 10% of whole population of world. To conclude, from both reasons resulting in health problem in vast number of people. If it is a problem that noone want to face there is one way to solve this which is countries should import fewer food products to better serve their citizenry economically.
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independelly
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the
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transaction needed to be
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crisis.

Firstly
,
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nutricient
, proteins and
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kind of vitamins are vital for human body both development phase and
also
physical health conditions. Main
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resouses
for them
are found
in special type of
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foods
which
are grown
in particular
areas over the
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world
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which
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vitamins C
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rise in tropical areas and
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county they don't have proper access to it.
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to provide whole
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with sufficient demand.
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will
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have to
rely on other nations for
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commodities.

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soure
of country's income in
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.
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, scare resources can cause the increase in demand of
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and
as a result
high price tag will be unavoidable solution. Following step would
be imported
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food
can
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only
be accessible for above the middle
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class
which is
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only
10% of whole population of world.

To conclude
, from both reasons resulting in health problem in vast number of
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people
.
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If
it is a problem that
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noone
want to face there is one way to solve this which is
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countries
should import fewer
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food
products to better serve their citizenry
economically
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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