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A friend of yours in thinking about apply for the same course that you did at university. he she has asked for you advice about studying this subject. Dear John

I hope you’re doing as well. I’m writing this letter for you about applying course at university. As you know, last month I passed a advanced training course at college about program computer games. This course was very useful for me because I learnt how to write game program and also I passed with reasonable price. Nowadays, due to increasing computer games among all range of age. I’m sure, I will successful in this business. At the moment I’m working at famous company in this field. I asked university about next program training courses, they told me first of next month helding this classes in two groups. You know, I should say this course will be useful for you and it’s better to learn sooner than later, so I know how crucial this course for you. I hope you book soon before it’s too late. Take care friend. Have a great day Warn regarding David
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I know how crucial this
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I hope you book
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it’s too late. Take care friend. Have a great day

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IELTS essay A friend of yours in thinking about apply for the same course that you did at university. he she has asked for you advice about studying this subject. Dear John

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
154 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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