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Some people believe that corporal punishment is the best way to discipline children while others argue that there are another ways. Do you agree with this statement?

Some people believe that corporal punishment is the best way to discipline children while others argue that there are another ways. VQo2m
Physical punishment has been controversial in the discipline of children over the past few decades. While a group of folks unjustifiably believe that corporal punishment is the most effective way to control children's behavior, others take issue with these notions. The forthcoming paragraphs will intend to argue against the significance of physical punishment in the nurture of children. Undoubtedly, smacking children might be valid in some respects. A vast number of parents tend to slap their children to explain them it is wrong what they did. By doing this, parents naturally want to cease tantrum of their children from their early ages. Additionally, when children commit something without permission, folks usually give corporal punishment to them so as to children will not make the same mistake again. A prime striking example of this is that, it is legally allowed for not only parents, but also teachers at school to spank children in particular circumstances in U. A. E. These few instances above bolster the existing belief of some individuals why corporal punishment is necessary in the upbringing of children. On the contrary, physical punishment undeniably has extreme repercussions on children's later life. The more children are smacked, the more cruelty and violence will get involved in their personality. If corporal punishment is increasingly involved in the nurture of children, they presumably believe as it is essential. Aside from that, they might also treat their own children with the same way in the imminent future. As reported in the recent research, 85% of criminals were orphans and violently raised up with corporal punishment. Accordingly, it is highly recommended that the frequency and significance of physical punishment in children's nurture ought to be lowered. In brief, this essay argued versus the essence of corporal punishment in children's upbringing. Personally, I justifiably believe that not only physical punishment, but also any other severe punishments should not be involved in the nurture of children which predominantly has aftereffects on children's later life. 322 words.
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Physical
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punishment
has been controversial in the discipline of
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children
over the past few decades. While a group of folks
unjustifiably
believe that corporal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishment
is the most effective way to control
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children's
behavior, others take issue with these notions. The forthcoming paragraphs will intend to argue against the significance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishment
in the nurture of children.

Undoubtedly
, smacking
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children
might be valid in
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some
respects. A vast number of parents tend to slap their
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children
to
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explain
them it is
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wrong
what they did. By doing this, parents
naturally
want to cease tantrum of their
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children
from their early ages.
Additionally
, when
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children
commit something without permission, folks
usually
give corporal
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punishment
to them
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so as to
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children
will not
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make
the same mistake again. A prime striking example of this is that, it is
legally
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allowed
for not
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only
parents,
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also
teachers at school to spank
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children
in particular
circumstances in U. A. E. These few instances above bolster the existing belief of
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some
individuals why corporal
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punishment
is necessary in the upbringing of children.

On the contrary
,
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physical
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punishment
undeniably
has extreme repercussions on
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children's
later life. The more
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children
are smacked
, the more cruelty and violence will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in their personality. If corporal
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punishment
is
increasingly
involved in the nurture of
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children
, they presumably believe as it is essential. Aside from that, they might
also
treat their
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own
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children
with the same way in the imminent future. As reported in the recent research, 85% of criminals were orphans and
violently
raised up with corporal
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punishment
.
Accordingly
, it is
highly
recommended that the frequency and significance of
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physical
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punishment
in
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children's
nurture ought to
be lowered
.

In brief
, this essay argued versus the essence of corporal
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punishment
in
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children's
upbringing.
Personally
, I
justifiably
believe that not
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only
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physical
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punishment
,
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but
also
any other severe
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punishments
should not
be involved
in the nurture of
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children
which
predominantly
has aftereffects on
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children's
later life.

322 words.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that corporal punishment is the best way to discipline children while others argue that there are another ways.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
330 words
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