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Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? v.16

According to some people, they believe that leisure activities for children must be educational. I totally agree with the statement due to importance of education as a m competitive environment like today. The leisure activities from educational curriculum itself will helps the students to achieve their goals in a better way. One of the best thing of an extracurricular activity must be educational related is that keen of interest in learning. As though students are very interested in games so a gamely activity related to curriculum will helps the poor students to learn better. For example students who are poor in subjects such as mathematics a bounce game in math will attribute their interest in catching the topic better. Also parents and teachers can take part in the process of learning thus they can evaluate the progress of children. Moreover a leisure activity related to curriculum is simplifying the content of learning and also making meaningful usage of their time. Perhaps children does not know how to use their time wisely, an educational leisure activity is a better choice to use their time in a very effective and efficient way. In conclusion as we are living in a competitive world today, importance of educational is much more so it is worth enough to use one's own time wisely and effectively for a better future. Although by interest in learning plays a major role to have their goals in a better way.
According to
some
people
, they believe that
leisure
activities
for children
must
be
educational
. I
totally
agree
with the statement due to importance of education as
a
m competitive environment like
today
. The
leisure
activities
from
educational
curriculum itself will
helps
the
students
to achieve their goals in a
better
way. One of the best thing of an extracurricular
activity
must
be
educational
related is that keen of interest in
learning
. As though
students
are
very
interested in games
so
a
gamely
activity
related to curriculum will
helps
the poor
students
to learn
better
.
For example
students
who are poor in subjects such as mathematics a bounce game in math will attribute their interest in catching the topic
better
.
Also
parents and teachers can
take part
in the process of
learning
thus
they can evaluate the progress of children.
Moreover
a
leisure
activity
related to curriculum is simplifying the content of
learning
and
also
making meaningful usage of their
time
. Perhaps children does not know how to
use
their
time
wisely
, an
educational
leisure
activity
is a
better
choice to
use
their
time
in a
very
effective and efficient way.
In conclusion
as we are living in a competitive world
today
, importance of
educational
is much more
so
it is worth
enough
to
use
one's
own
time
wisely
and
effectively
for a
better
future.
Although
by interest in
learning
plays a major role to have their goals in a
better
way.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.

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