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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.1

Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school 1
Certain individuals believe that assignments should be given to pupils daily so they can excel academically; however, other individuals, myself included, think that giving pupils daily tasks to do at home is not necessary. This essay will examine the two sides of the argument. On the one hand, one main reason why some persons believe that daily homework for children is necessary to excel in their academics is because it keeps them occupied at home. Many kids cannot make the right decisions; thus, they do not dedicate reading time after the school hours. However, the daily tasks make it mandatory for children to do some academic tasks, even while in their private abode. As a result, young ones gradually imbibe the spirit of doing education-related work daily. For example, as a child, I did not do school tasks at home during the holidays because there was no assignment to submit the day before, unlike during school seasons when I was mandated to submit a task I had done the previous day. On the other hand, other persons, including myself, think that daily homework is not necessary because of the importance of being a well-rounded individual. Children are at an age when they are developing; hence, they should be exposed to a variety of activities like outdoor activities such as swimming, hiking, and they should also take out time to develop other skills like singing and dancing. Furthermore, children should be allowed time to play games and participate in non-educational activities. Consequently, these kids will develop to become well-rounded individuals of the society. For instance, a retrospective questionnaire filled by individuals showed that people who participated in a plethora of activities as children are more successful in life and their careers than those who buried their heads in academic work only. In conclusion, some individuals think that kids should be given house exercises everyday to excel academically, while others believe that daily house exercise is not necessary. Although, I believe both sides have their reasons; in my opinion, giving kids daily assignment is unnecessary because of the reason highlighted in the essay.
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given
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so
they can excel
academically
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however
,
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other
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individuals
, myself included,
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think
that giving pupils
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daily
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tasks
to do at home is not
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necessary
. This essay will examine the two sides of the argument.

On the one hand, one main reason why
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some
persons
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believe
that
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daily
homework for
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children
is
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necessary
to excel in their academics is
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because
it
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keeps
them occupied at home.
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kids
cannot
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make
the right decisions;
thus
, they do not dedicate reading time after the school hours.
However
, the
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daily
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tasks
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make
it mandatory for
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children
to do
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some
academic
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tasks
, even while in their private abode.
As a result
, young ones
gradually
imbibe the spirit of doing education-related work
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daily
.
For example
, as a child, I did not do school
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tasks
at home during the holidays
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because
there was no assignment to submit the day
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before
, unlike during school seasons when I
was mandated
to submit a
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task
I had done the previous day.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
persons, including myself,
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think
that
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daily
homework is not
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necessary
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because
of the importance of being a well-rounded
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individual
.
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Children
are at an age when they are developing;
hence
, they should
be exposed
to a variety of
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activities
like outdoor
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activities
such as swimming, hiking, and they should
also
take out time to develop
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other
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skills
like singing and dancing.
Furthermore
,
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children
should be
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allowed
time to play games and participate in non-educational
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activities
.
Consequently
, these
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kids
will develop to become well-rounded
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individuals
of the society.
For instance
, a retrospective questionnaire filled by
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individuals
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showed
that
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people
who participated in a plethora of
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activities
as
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children
are more successful in life and their careers than those who buried their heads in academic work
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only
.

In conclusion
,
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individuals
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that
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kids
should be
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given
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house
exercises
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everyday
to excel
academically
, while others
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believe
that
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daily
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house
exercise is not
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necessary
. Although, I
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believe
both sides have their reasons; in my opinion, giving
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kids
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daily
assignment is unnecessary
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because
of the reason highlighted in the essay.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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    Present relevant ideas
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