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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.6

Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school 6
It is argued by many that the internet is a source of immense information and has enabled people all over the world to get educated. However, not all information on the internet is trustworthy as some people use it to spread fake news and rumours, whereas steps, such as reporting the information as invalid, need to be taken to have a check on it. Firstly, we should not blindly trust the information available online, without even validating it with other sources. Although the internet has become a place where anyone can post their views, some people even upload fake news and incorrect information as a measure to attract people's attention on the internet. For instance, the internet is filled with fake photo shopped pictures of a man walking on water, aliens visiting earth, a human child born with a tail and so on. Moreover, some with even adverse mindset, spread rumours to create havoc and a feeling of fear among the masses. Secondly, to avoid falling prey to fake news, we need to validate that information with different sources and check out if all say the same thing. In addition, all the websites need to have a functionality of reporting the data so that users who find it incorrect can flag it and then later the people or the website can check its authenticity. For example, Facebook has the same reporting mechanism to employ a measure of control over the information. In conclusion, the internet is an ocean of information and has led to several opportunities to the people of the world. However, we should not blindly follow everything present on it. Whereas some control measures could be employed to fight this spreading of incorrect information.
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is argued
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many
that the internet is a source of immense
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information
and has enabled
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people
all over the world to
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get
educated.
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, not all
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information
on the internet is trustworthy as
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some
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people
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use
it to spread
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fake
news and
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rumours
, whereas steps, such as reporting the
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information
as invalid, need to
be taken
to have a
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check
on it.

Firstly
, we should not
blindly
trust the
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information
available online, without even validating it with other sources. Although the internet has become a place where anyone can post their views,
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some
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people
even upload
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fake
news and incorrect
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information
as a measure to attract
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people
's attention on the internet.
For instance
, the internet
is filled
with
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fake
photo shopped pictures of a
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man
walking on water, aliens visiting earth, a human child born with a tail and
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so
on.
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,
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some
with even adverse mindset, spread
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rumours
to create havoc and a feeling of fear among the masses.

Secondly
, to avoid falling prey to
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fake
news, we need to validate that
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information
with
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different
sources and
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check
out if all say the same thing.
In addition
, all the websites need to have a functionality of reporting the data
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so
that users who find it incorrect can flag it and then later the
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people
or the website can
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check
its authenticity.
For example
, Facebook has the same reporting mechanism to employ a measure of control over the information.

In conclusion
, the internet is an ocean of
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information
and has led to several opportunities to the
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people
of the world.
However
, we should not
blindly
follow everything present on it.
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Whereas
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some
control measures could
be employed
to fight this spreading of incorrect
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information
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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