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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. v. 3
Whether or not children should receive homework every day is a matter of debate. Many parents and teachers insist that students should be given some tasks that they should complete at home because it enables them to internalize the concepts they learned at school. However, others completely oppose this view and claim that homework puts students under pressure. Both views will be discussed in this essay before arriving at a conclusion. Homework certainly benefits students in many ways. Most students will not learn anything unless it is compulsory. By giving them homework every day, teachers can ensure that they learn their lessons on the same day they are taught in the class. In my opinion, this is the biggest benefit of giving homework. Without constant practice it is not possible to succeed at school. For example, subjects like science and mathematics need regular revision. If students do not do homework, they will suffer during exams because of the piling up of work. On the flip side, giving too much homework can be counterproductive. If students go home with dozens of tasks after spending seven or eight hours at school, the consequences could be quite catastrophic. The human brain, especially the brain of young children, requires rest to perform efficiently. Otherwise, it could malfunction and children might develop depression. In my opinion, the concept of homework itself is not harmful. Problems arise when teachers give too much homework and when students fail to use their time wisely. For instance, if the deadline for a specific assignment is after 2 weeks, most students would leave it until the very last minute and by doing this they are putting themselves under unwanted pressure. Parents can prevent such situations by regularly monitoring the homework of their children. In a nutshell, some amount of homework is definitely beneficial for the academic success of students. However, teachers need to ensure that they are not burdening students with excessive work.
Consider shortening this phrase to just "Whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Whether or not
children should receive
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homework
every day is a matter of debate.
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Many
parents and
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teachers
insist that
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students
should be
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given
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some
tasks that they should complete at home
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because
it enables them to internalize the concepts they learned at school.
However
, others completely oppose this view and claim that
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homework
puts
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students
under pressure. Both views will
be discussed
in this essay
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before
arriving at a conclusion.

Homework
certainly
benefits
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students
in
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many
ways. Most
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students
will not learn anything unless it is compulsory. By giving them
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homework
every day,
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teachers
can ensure that they learn their lessons on the same day they
are taught
in the
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class
. In my opinion, this is the biggest benefit of giving
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homework
. Without constant practice it is not possible to succeed at school.
For example
, subjects like science and mathematics need regular revision. If
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students
do not do
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homework
, they will suffer during exams
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the piling up of work.

On the flip side, giving too much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homework
can be counterproductive. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
go home with dozens of tasks after spending seven or eight hours at school, the consequences could be quite catastrophic. The human brain,
especially
the brain of young children, requires rest to perform
efficiently
.
Otherwise
, it could malfunction and children might develop depression.

In my opinion, the concept of
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homework
itself is not harmful. Problems arise when
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teachers
give too much
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homework
and when
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students
fail to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their time
wisely
.
For instance
, if the deadline for a specific assignment is after 2 weeks, most
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students
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
it until the
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very
last minute and by doing this they are putting themselves under unwanted pressure. Parents can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
such situations by
regularly
monitoring the
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homework
of their children.

In a nutshell,
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some
amount of
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homework
is definitely beneficial for the academic success of
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students
.
However
,
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teachers
need to ensure that they are not burdening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
with excessive work.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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