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Some people believe that children should be banned from using mobile phones during school days.

Some people believe that children should be banned from using mobile phones during school days. gWNgL
Recently, mobile phones have been very useful in many ways. It can be a dichanaly, calculator. One machine can be anything that you can think of. It can be said that mobile phones are another thing that we can not leave behind. Men and women in this day use mobile phones while they work to calculate math or research for present information. Why should some people steal this capability from students to research information. To begin with, using the telephone during the school day has three advantages. First, it is an information center for students and a research center. This day, students have to present projects and group work. Mobile phone can be a useful machine insteart to use a laptop. In comparison, mobile phones are lighter and easy to carry on. Secondly, cell phones are a digital system. It is easy to use digital documents. Many schools give students sheets or paper that originally come from digital platforms by printing paper. Printing paper destroys forest and national resources. Thirdly, the emergency call from their parents. Many people think it is difficult to have an emergency problem or have an accident but everything can happen accidently. It is much easier and useful if students have their phones with them all the time. In conclusion, not being banned from using mobile phones during school days is a better way for students. It will help students to find information and research documents. Moreover, a mobile phone is a device that can use digital paper or a digital platform of learning and the most important reason is they can answer an emergency call from their parents.
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useful in
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, calculator. One machine can be anything that you can
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of. It can
be said
that mobile
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phones
are another thing that we can not
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behind.
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and women in this day
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use
mobile
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phones
while they work to calculate math or
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research
for present information. Why should
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some
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people
steal this capability from
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students
to
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research
information.

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begin
with, using the telephone during the school day has three advantages.
First
, it is an information center for
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students
and a
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research
center. This day,
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students
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have to
present projects and group work. Mobile
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phone
can be a useful machine
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insteart
to
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use
a laptop.
In comparison
, mobile
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phones
are lighter and easy to carry on.
Secondly
, cell
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phones
are a digital system. It is easy to
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use
digital documents.
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Many
schools give
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students
sheets or paper that
originally
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come
from digital platforms by printing paper. Printing paper
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destroys
forest and national resources.
Thirdly
, the emergency call from their parents.
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people
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think
it is difficult to have an emergency problem or have an accident
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but
everything can happen
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accidently
. It is much easier and useful if
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students
have their
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phones
with them all the time.

In conclusion
, not
being banned
from using mobile
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phones
during school days is a better way for
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students
. It will
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help
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students
to find information and
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research
documents.
Moreover
, a mobile
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phone
is a device that can
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use
digital paper or a digital platform of learning and the most
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important
reason is they can answer an emergency call from their parents.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should be banned from using mobile phones during school days.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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