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some people believe that animals should be exploited. discuss both views and give your opinion

some people believe that animals should be exploited. discuss both views and give your opinion DYPY6
The exploitation of animals by humans has become a contentious issue. Some people believed that animals should not be exploited and that humans should treat animals fairly. Others, on the other side, believe that animals should be used to help people in a variety of ways, such as as a source of food or for medical tests. The next essay will go through both points of view in detail, however in my opinion, animals can be used as a source of food or to aid humans in a fair and equitable way, and humans should treat each other with respect. On the one hand, some people believe that because animals are living organisms, mankind does not have the right to exploit them. True, animals exist by following their senses, but they have the same emotions as people, therefore manipulating them would be wrong. It has been reported in many cases that some of the cows screamed before being murdered in the butcher, demonstrating that they had the same feelings as humans. In another example, some of the animals were neglected by their masters despite the fact that they had been heavily exploited, forcing them can become sick or wounded. Nevertheless, it is clear that humans require the support of animals in a number of ways. To start with, humans require the assistance of some animals in the manufacture and availability of food. Farmers in many nations use cows, buffalos, or horses to produce their farms, and certain dairy farm animals, such as chickens and sheep, are slaughtered for their meat. There would be a humanity concern if these creatures did not exist, such as a shortage of food sources and human starving. Second, for the good of mankind, certain animals are employed in scientific studies or diagnostic tests. Several novel drugs are now being studied in mice or monkeys before being tried on humans. Thousands of human lives have been saved as a result of these experiments, which may appear to be barbaric. Lastly, different people have differing perspectives about animal exploitation. Some individuals agree with the concept, while others don't. Employing or using animals to assist people, in my opinion, is not an issue as long as we exploit them in a reasonable manner. Many farmers, for example, use animals as field assistants, and the animals should be treated properly for and supplied.
The exploitation of
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animals
by
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humans
has become a contentious issue.
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Some
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people
believed that
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animals
should not
be exploited
and that
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humans
should treat
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animals
fairly
. Others, on the
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other
side, believe that
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animals
should be
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used
to
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help
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people
in a variety of ways, such
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as as
a source of
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food
or for medical
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tests
. The
next
essay will go through both points of view in detail,
however
in my opinion,
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animals
can be
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used
as a source of
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food
or to aid
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humans
in a
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fair
and equitable way, and
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humans
should treat each
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other
with respect.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
believe that
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because
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animals
are living organisms, mankind does not have the right to exploit them. True,
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animals
exist by following their senses,
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but
they have the same emotions as
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people
,
therefore
manipulating them would be
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wrong
. It has
been reported
in
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many
cases that
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some of the
cows screamed
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before
being murdered
in the butcher, demonstrating that they had the same feelings as
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humans
. In another example,
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some of the
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animals
were neglected
by their masters despite the fact that they had been
heavily
exploited, forcing them can become sick or wounded.

Nevertheless
, it is
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clear
that
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humans
require the support of
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animals
in a number of ways. To
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start
with,
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humans
require the assistance of
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some
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animals
in the manufacture and availability of
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food
. Farmers in
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many
nations
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use
cows,
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buffalos
, or horses to produce their farms, and certain dairy farm
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animals
, such as chickens and sheep,
are slaughtered
for their meat. There would be a humanity concern if these creatures did not exist, such as a shortage of
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food
sources and
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human
starving. Second, for the
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good
of mankind, certain
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animals
are employed
in scientific studies or diagnostic
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tests
. Several novel drugs are
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now
being studied
in mice or monkeys
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before
being tried
on
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humans
. Thousands of
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human
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lives
have
been saved
as a result
of these experiments, which may appear to be barbaric.

Lastly
,
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people
have differing
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perspectives about
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animal
exploitation.
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Some
individuals
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agree
with the concept, while others don't. Employing or using
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animals
to assist
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people
, in my opinion, is not an issue as long as we exploit them
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in a reasonable manner
.
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farmers,
for example
,
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use
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animals
as field assistants, and the
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animals
should
be treated
properly
for and supplied.
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IELTS essay some people believe that animals should be exploited. discuss both views and give your opinion

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