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"Computerized Voting Systems "

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The lecture explained why the computerized voting system can not replace the traditional voting system. There are the following three reasons. First of all, not everyoen one can use computers correctly. Some people do not have access to computers, some people are not used of computers, and some people are even scared of this new technology. If the voters do not know how to use a computer, how do you expect them to finish the voting process through computers? This directly refutes the reading passage which states that computerized voting is easier by just touchingthe screen. Secondly, computers may make mistakes as the people do. As computers are programmed by the human beings, thus erros are inevitable in the computer system. Problems caused by computer voting systems may be more serious than those caused by people. A larger number of votes might be miss counted or even removed from the system. Furthermore, it would take more energy to recount the votes. Again this contradicts what is stated in the reading which stated that only people will make mistakes in counting. Thirdly, computerized voting system is not reliable because it has not reached a stable status. People trust computers to conduct banking transactions because the computerized banking system is being used daily and frecuently and has been stable. How ever, the voting does not happen as often as banking thus the computerized voting system has not been proved to be totally reliable. All in all, not everyone can use a computer properly, computer cause mistakes and computerized voting system is not reliable are the main reasons why computerized voting system can not replace the traditional voting system.
The lecture
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why the
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can not replace the traditional voting

system. There are the following three reasons.

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one can
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people
do not have access to

computers,
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are not
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used
of computers, and
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some
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people
are even scared of this new

technology. If the voters do not know how to
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use
a computer, how do you
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expect
them to finish

the
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voting
process through computers? This
directly
refutes the reading passage which states that

computerized
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voting
is easier by
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just
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touchingthe
screen.

Secondly
, computers may
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make
mistakes as the
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people
do. As computers
are programmed
by the

human beings,
thus
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erros
are inevitable in the computer
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. Problems caused by computer

voting
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systems
may be more serious than those caused by
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people
. A larger number of votes

might be miss counted or even removed from the
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system
.
Furthermore
, it would take more

energy to recount the votes. Again this contradicts what
is stated
in the reading which stated that

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people
will
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make
mistakes in counting.

Thirdly
,
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computerized
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voting
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system
is not reliable
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because
it has not reached a stable status.

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People
trust computers to conduct banking transactions
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banking

system is being
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used
daily and
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frecuently
and has been stable.
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, the
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voting
does not

happen as
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often
as banking
thus
the
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computerized
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voting
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system
has not
been proved
to be

totally
reliable.

All in all, not everyone can
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use
a computer
properly
, computer cause mistakes and computerized

voting
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is not reliable are the main reasons why
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computerized
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voting
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can not

replace the traditional
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system
.
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IELTS essay "Computerized Voting Systems "

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  American English
6 paragraphs
276 words
5.5
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