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Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or e v.4

Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. 4
Whether we should save all wild animals or some species is a debating topic nowadays. While many people argue that we should secure all wild creatures, others consider that some rare wild animals should be protected. This essay will discuss why some folks favor guarding few uncommon wild animals but why shielding all wild animals in ultimately superior. Some people do not support the idea to preserve all wild animals because in their viewpoint overpopulation of wild creatures could turn into a danger to human life. For instance, if we keep all wild animals then their population might become overcrowded, and as a result, they might move towards living areas from the forests, which would be quite alarming. Another reason they give that protecting all wildlife requires a handsome amount of money. According to their point of view that money can be used for humanity, as, human beings are still dying with starvation in many third world countries. Conversely, there are people who believe to protect all wild animals. They think that all wild animals are part of our ecosystem. If some of these wild animals get extinct then the whole ecosystem would not be balanced. Additionally, wild animals are also beneficial for humans as medical treatments. For example, the blood of the snake can be utilized to cure skin problems. In short, protecting some wild animals may lead to the extinction of others. Clearly, it costs the heterogeneity of the world. This essay discussed the opposing views of people on guarding wild animals. In my opinion, we should conserve all wild animals because every animal is important to keep the ecosystem balanced.
Whether we should save all wild
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species is a debating topic nowadays. While
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many
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people
argue that we should secure all wild creatures, others consider that
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rare wild
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folks favor guarding few uncommon wild
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why shielding all wild
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superior.

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people
do not support the
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idea
to preserve all wild
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animals
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because
in their viewpoint overpopulation of wild creatures could turn into a
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danger
to human life.
For instance
, if we
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keep
all wild
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animals
then their population might become overcrowded, and
as a result
, they might
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move
towards living areas from the forests, which would be quite alarming. Another reason they give that protecting all wildlife requires a handsome amount of money. According to their point of view that money can be
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used
for humanity, as, human beings are
still
dying with starvation in
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many
third world countries.

Conversely
, there are
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people
who believe to protect all wild
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animals
. They
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think
that all wild
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animals
are part of our ecosystem. If
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some
of these wild
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animals
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get
extinct then the whole ecosystem would not
be balanced
.
Additionally
, wild
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animals
are
also
beneficial for humans as medical treatments.
For example
, the blood of the snake can
be utilized
to cure skin problems. In short, protecting
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some
wild
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animals
may lead to the extinction of others.
Clearly
, it costs the heterogeneity of the world.

This essay discussed the opposing views of
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people
on guarding wild
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animals
. In my opinion, we should conserve all wild
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animals
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because
every
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animal
is
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important
to
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keep
the ecosystem balanced.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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