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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted becouse it couses serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted becouse it couses serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources dK2E
There is a debate that the travelling by air has to be stopped, as it's the cause of an increased air pollution and is a burden on the oil products. I don't agree with this, as the aeroplanes have reduced the distances and the journey has become comfortable. On the one hand, there is a belief that the index of the polluted air has increased in the recent past, and it's related to more travelling by the planes. Secondly, as the airline industry is the largest consumer of the petroleum sources, so it's considered that it may end the world's fuel resources. So to say, there should be a restriction on this mode of transport, in order to save the energy as well as to make the environment clean. For instance, some scientists in the US have announced that the Eco friendly aircraft engines have to be developed to counter the smoke level in the air. On the other hand, in this era of science and technology, the world has become a global village and one can fly from one corner of the earth to another in less than 24 hours. It is possible due to the technological advancement and new inventions of helicopters and fixed wing machines, and I also back this idea. This fast mode of travelling has a positive impact on the growth of business, as the transportation of goods has become easier. Moreover, the tourism has flourished too much, thus enhancing the social ties between the countries. For example, the Uzbekistan government has developed airline industry as an economic hub by introducing multiple airlines of all overtheworld. To conclude, in order to meet the fast pace of life, the mode of transportation has to be swift. In this way, the country will not only remain connected with the rest of the globe, but will also flourish by leaps and bounds.
There is a debate that the travelling by
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air
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has to
be
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stopped
, as it's the cause of an increased
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air
pollution and is a burden on the oil products. I don't
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agree
with this, as the
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aeroplanes
have
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reduced
the distances and the journey has become comfortable. On the one hand, there is a belief that the index of the polluted
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air
has increased in the recent past, and it's related to more travelling by the
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planes
.
Secondly
, as the airline industry is the largest consumer of the petroleum sources,
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so
it's considered that it may
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end
the world's fuel resources.
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So
to say, there should be a restriction on this mode of transport, in order to save the energy
as well
as to
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make
the environment clean.
For instance
,
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some
scientists in the US have announced that the Eco friendly aircraft engines
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have to
be developed
to counter the smoke level in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
.
On the other hand
, in this era of science and technology, the world has become a global village and one can
fly
from one corner of the earth to another in less than 24 hours. It is possible due to the technological advancement and new inventions of helicopters and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
wing machines, and I
also
back this
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idea
. This
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fast
mode of travelling has a
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positive
impact on the growth of business, as the transportation of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
has become easier.
Moreover
, the tourism has flourished too much,
thus
enhancing the social ties between the countries.
For example
, the Uzbekistan
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government
has developed airline industry as an economic hub by introducing multiple airlines of all
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overtheworld
.
To conclude
, in order to
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meet
the
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fast
pace of life, the mode of transportation
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has to
be swift. In this way, the country will not
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only
remain connected with the rest of the globe,
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but
will
also
flourish by leaps and bounds.

IELTS essay Some people believe that air travel should be restricted becouse it couses serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources

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