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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. K6qN
If we define culture as shared beliefs, values, attitudes and behaviours, it stands to reason then that a person's country of origin impacts their culture. The question is to what degree. Is nationality the defining influence or is it just one of many factors in play? Personally speaking, I would say both arguments have validity, but I would lean towards the latter. It is easy to understand the ‘defining influence’ argument. If someone is born and raised in a place, they will be heavily influenced by it. Psychologists refer to this as the ‘nurture argument’ - you are a product of your environment. For example, if your country's cuisine uses certain ingredients, your palate gets accustomed to those ingredients, but may struggle with other less familiar flavours. If your country has a traditional style of music, say, reggae or rock, all citizens will be exposed to it and, as a result, are more likely to enjoy it. On the other side of the argument we need to consider the effects of globalisation. Most people have daily access and exposure to other cultures. The evidence is all around us- restaurants, films and foreign businesses are ubiquitous. One of the benefits of globalisation is that it offers us a selection of cultural possibilities to choose from. It is unlikely that you will find any citizen of a certain country who does not have likes or preferences that come from outside of their country of origin. In addition, more and more people work, study or travel extensively away from their home country. Inevitably, these people will be subject to new influences. My own view is that while we are influenced by our nationality, in this globalised world, one's country of origin is only one aspect of our collective culture. We all adopt elements from other cultures on a daily basis, unconsciously or according to our preferences and experiences. To my mind, this is what makes the world such an interesting place.
If we define
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culture
as shared beliefs, values, attitudes and
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behaviours
, it stands to reason then that a person's
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country
of origin impacts their
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culture
. The question is to what degree. Is nationality the defining influence or is it
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just
one of
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many
factors in play?
Personally
speaking, I would say both
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arguments
have validity,
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I would lean towards the latter.

It is easy to understand the ‘defining influence’
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argument
. If someone
is born
and raised in a place, they will be
heavily
influenced by it. Psychologists refer to this as the ‘nurture
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argument’
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you are a product of your environment.
For example
, if your country's cuisine
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uses
certain ingredients, your palate
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gets
accustomed to those ingredients,
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but
may struggle with
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other
less familiar
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flavours
. If your
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country
has a traditional style of music, say, reggae or rock, all citizens will
be exposed
to it and,
as a result
, are more likely to enjoy it.

On the
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other
side of the
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argument
we need to consider the effects of
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globalisation
. Most
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people
have daily access and exposure to
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other
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cultures
. The evidence is all around us- restaurants, films and foreign businesses are ubiquitous. One of the benefits of
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globalisation
is that it offers us a selection of cultural possibilities to choose from. It is unlikely that you will find any citizen of a certain
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country
who does not have likes or preferences that
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come
from
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outside of
their
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country
of origin.
In addition
, more and more
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people
work, study or travel
extensively
away from their home
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country
.
Inevitably
, these
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people
will be subject to new influences.

My
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own
view is that while we
are influenced
by our nationality, in this
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globalised
world, one's
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country
of origin is
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only
one aspect of our collective
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culture
. We all adopt elements from
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other
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cultures
on a daily basis,
unconsciously
or according to our preferences and experiences. To my mind, this is what
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makes
the world such an interesting place.

IELTS essay Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence.

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