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many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films

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In recent years, more and more people adore to watch films which are produced abroad than their own traditional films. I believe that traditional films need help as a finance by government Films teach us many essential things about life. However, nowadays most of people choose foreign films rather than locally produced films. The most significant reason for preference of abroad films is that it depends on quality of films. Thus, majority of widely-recognized films are produced by foreign developed countries. Secondly, actors or actrees who play on films are well-known people around the world. As an outcome, most of people know and interested in their life and their career. Through that their influence for foreign films higher than local films. By the way, foreign films based on a true story and most of them nominated for an award. Also it might be couse to increase number of viewers for these films. From my prespective, local films should be more valued than foreign one which has gained much popularity all over the world. Hence, local films represent the history and culture of countries and nations. A foreign films might be not suitable for their reliogn. Thus, in order to remain value of local films government should aid it by investigating money for this industry. Because, if film makers have good condition for work and modern technological devices, they can accomplish high achievments. Together that if they have a chance to tkae more salary and benifit behid making film, they may start working hard and effectively. Since, all producers want to get high benifit through making film. So that government should give financial support for producers so as to improve local film industry. To sum up, local film is, undoubtly, significant humans and i believe that so as to maintain value and motivating film makers, government ought to invest money in this field.
In recent years, more and more
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people
adore to
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watch
films which
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abroad than their
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own
traditional films. I believe that traditional films need
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help
as a finance by
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government


Films teach us
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many
essential things about life.
However
, nowadays most of
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people
choose
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foreign
films
rather
than
locally
produced films. The most significant reason for preference of abroad films is that it depends on quality of films.
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,
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majority of
widely
-recognized films
are produced
by
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foreign
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developed countries
.
Secondly
, actors or
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actrees
who play on films are well-known
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people
around the world. As an outcome, most of
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people
know and interested in their life and their career. Through that their influence for
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foreign
films higher than
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local
films. By the way,
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foreign
films based on a true story and most of them nominated for an award.
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Also
it might be
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couse
to increase number of viewers for these films.

From my
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prespective
,
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local
films should be more valued than
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foreign
one which has gained much popularity all over the world.
Hence
,
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local
films represent the history and culture of countries and nations. A
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foreign
films might be not suitable for their
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reliogn
.
Thus
, in order to remain value of
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local
films
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government
should aid it by investigating money for this industry.
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Because
, if film makers have
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good
condition for work and modern technological devices, they can accomplish high
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achievments
. Together that if they have a chance to
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tkae
more salary and
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benifit
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behid
making film, they may
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start
working
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hard
and
effectively
.
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Since
, all producers want to
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get
high
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benifit
through making film.
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that
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government
should give financial support for producers
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so as to
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improve
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local
film industry.

To sum up,
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local
film is,
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undoubtly
, significant humans and
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i
believe that
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so as to
maintain value and motivating film makers,
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government
ought to invest money in this field.

IELTS essay many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films

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