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Some people believe that a good teamwork makes companies successful. Others say that it is more important for companies to have good leaders. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that a good teamwork makes companies successful. Others say that it is more important for companies to have good leaders. ymbP
Team spirit is crucial to be a successful organisation. Some people opine that good leaders play a vital role in the development of a company whilst others have contrast viewpoint. Although leaders lead organisation, I believe team efforts help in its growth. On the one hand, leaders decide all the paramount decisions in companies. If these decisions are not taken wisely, companies will suffer. The financial position of these will deteriorate by a wrong decision. These may face a huge loss. For instance, choosing the right buyers for products affect directly revenue. Leaders are the face of the organisation, they are the reason for the growth as well as the loss of the company. This is paramount that leaders should be efficient and imbibed with leadership qualities for the growth of the organisation. However, good leaders are indispensable factor causing the success of organisations. On the other hand, organisations are not created by a single person or leader. It is a collaboration of joint efforts. If everyone does not join hands, endeavours cannot be achieved. Individual efforts are not enough to achieve common goals. Companies are a group of people who join together to attain a common objective. Efforts of these people can help in the overall development of the company. For instance, if an order of producing goods is received by a company, this order cannot be fulfiled by labour's co-operation. Hence, group efforts are necessary for a successful organisation. In conclusion, team-work and accurate leadership, both are vital for the growth of organisations. In my perspective, these both are equally crucial, good leaders decide and team follow obediently which lead to success.
Team spirit is crucial to be a successful
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people
opine that
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good
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leaders
play a vital role in the development of a
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company
whilst others have contrast viewpoint. Although
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leaders
lead
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organisation
, I believe team
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efforts
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help
in its growth.

On the one hand,
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leaders
decide all the paramount decisions in
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companies
. If these decisions are not taken
wisely
,
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companies
will suffer. The financial position of these will deteriorate by a
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wrong
decision. These may face a huge loss.
For instance
, choosing the right buyers for products affect
directly
revenue.
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Leaders
are the face of the
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organisation
, they are the reason for the growth
as well
as the loss of the
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company
. This is paramount that
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leaders
should be efficient and imbibed with leadership qualities for the growth of the
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organisation
.
However
,
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good
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leaders
are indispensable factor causing the success of
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organisations
.

On the other hand
,
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organisations
are not created by a single person or
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leader
. It is a collaboration of joint
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efforts
. If everyone does not
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join
hands,
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endeavours
cannot
be achieved
. Individual
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efforts
are not
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enough
to achieve common goals.
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Companies
are a group of
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people
who
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join
together to attain a common objective.
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Efforts
of these
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people
can
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help
in the
overall
development of the
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company
.
For instance
, if an order of producing
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goods
is received
by a
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company
, this order cannot be
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fulfiled
by
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labour
's co-operation.
Hence
, group
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efforts
are necessary for a successful
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organisation
.

In conclusion
, team-work and accurate leadership, both are vital for the growth of
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organisations
. In my perspective, these both are
equally
crucial,
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good
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leaders
decide and team follow
obediently
which lead to success.

IELTS essay Some people believe that a good teamwork makes companies successful. Others say that it is more important for companies to have good leaders.

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