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Some people believe that a college or a university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views, which view do you agree with? Explain why? v.1

Some people believe that a college or a university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views, which view do you agree with? Explain why? v. 1
Nowadays children are getting more inclined towards the phones. Parents feel the excessive use of phones could be harmful for them. Although, phones have made our lives better but still have its side effects as well. Children have started spending time on the phones which as has started affecting their mental and physical growth. Some parents have raised concern regarding the excessive use of phones by their children. Children have become more physically unfit because they are spending engaged on cell phones playing games, watching movies, clicking photos and other social media sites. For example, if a child continues playing games on the phone do not gout play any sport. Finally, the child will start gaining weight. If some parents think its harmful, but some on the other hand, believe it’s a very useful device. Cell phones can be considered a safety device, since parents can easily reach out to their children. Nowadays crime rate has increased in all over the world. For example, if a child goes out to a party and will be late while coming. In such situation they can easily call their parents and inform them. In conclusion, I would like to say that cell phones definitely a very useful resource, but at the same it has own disadvantages as well. However, parents need to keep a check, how long the children are busy on these devices. Children should be allowed to use their cell phones only for a short period of time like while they are in school or when go out alone with their friends. This is kind of practice will give them time for other outdoor activities.
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children
are getting more inclined towards the
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phones
.
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Parents
feel the excessive
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use
of
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phones
could be harmful for them. Although,
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phones
have made our
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lives
better
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but
still
have its side effects
as well
.
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Children
have
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started
spending time on the
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phones
which as has
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started
affecting their mental and physical growth.

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Some
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parents
have raised concern regarding the excessive
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use
of
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phones
by their
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children
.
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Children
have become more
physically
unfit
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because
they are spending engaged on
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cell
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phones
playing games, watching movies, clicking photos and other social media sites.
For example
, if a child continues playing games on the
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phone
do not gout play any sport.
Finally
, the child will
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start
gaining weight.

If
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some
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parents
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but
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some
on the other hand
, believe it’s a
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very
useful device.
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Cell
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phones
can
be considered
a safety device, since
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parents
can
easily
reach out to their
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children
. Nowadays crime rate has increased in all over the world.
For example
, if a child goes out to a party and will be late while coming. In such situation they can
easily
call their
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parents
and inform them.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that
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cell
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phones
definitely a
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very
useful resource,
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but
at the same it has
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own
disadvantages
as well
.
However
,
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parents
need to
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keep
a
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check
, how long the
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children
are busy on these devices.
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Children
should be
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allowed
to
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use
their
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cell
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phones
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only
for a short period of time like while they are in school or when go out alone with their friends. This is kind of practice will give them time for other outdoor activities.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that a college or a university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views, which view do you agree with? Explain why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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