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Some people believe schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others think that it is more crucial to reward students who show progress. Discuss both views and express your own opinion?

Some people believe schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others think that it is more crucial to reward students who show progress. WpBa
People are divided on the issue of rewarding students for academic achievements. Some People are divided on the issue of rewarding students for academic achievements. Some support the idea of rewarding pupils who are the toppers, whereas others opine that it is better to reward those who show major improvements. This essay intends to delve into both perspectives. I, however, opine in encouraging both categories of students with rewards. There are several reasons, why the students with the best academic performance should be granted an incentive. The core of this argument is that rewarding them will motivate all other students to study hard and achieve the best results. Exams are like a competition, and the winners deserve to be recognized. However, it’s undeniable that in the same class, there are various student levels. The toppers are very few, and are in most cases capable of working hard as well as doing smart study. They know how much effort is required in which areas. All students are not so gifted. The mediocre students, despite spending lots of time and effort, are still incapable of competing with those having higher IQ. Therefore, it is imperative to acknowledge their effort also. The policy of rewarding them would encourage a wide range of students who persevere and make improvements in their results. I believe that encouraging all achievers is a must. The achievement of the toppers, is visible to all, and should be remunerated with reward. However, the onus is on the teachers to identify the students who show the maximum improvements and encourage them by bringing them into the limelight. For example, if a student gets 40% marks in first trimester exams, but manages to reach 60-70% in second trimester, then he should be given due recognition for his hard work. This would be a better motivation for a wider group of students. To conclude, it is necessary to reward all achievers – the toppers, as well as the ones showing good progress in their study
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students
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toppers
, whereas others opine that it is better to reward those
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who
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show
major improvements. This essay intends to delve into both perspectives. I,
however
, opine in encouraging both categories of
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students
with rewards.

There are several reasons, why the
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students
with the best academic performance should
be granted
an incentive. The core of this argument is that
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rewarding
them will motivate all other
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students
to study
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hard
and achieve the best results. Exams are like a competition, and the winners deserve to
be recognized
.
However
, it’s undeniable that in the same
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class
, there are various
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student
levels. The
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toppers
are
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very
few, and are
in most cases
capable of working
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hard
as well
as doing smart study. They know how much effort
is required
in which areas. All
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students
are not
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so
gifted. The mediocre
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students
, despite spending lots of time and effort, are
still
incapable of competing with those having higher IQ.
Therefore
, it is imperative to acknowledge their effort
also
. The policy of
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rewarding
them would encourage a wide range of
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students
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who
persevere and
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make
improvements in their results.

I believe that encouraging all achievers is a
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must
. The achievement of the
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toppers
, is visible to all, and should
be remunerated
with reward.
However
, the onus is on the teachers to identify the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
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who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the maximum improvements and encourage them by bringing them into the limelight.
For example
, if a
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student
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gets
40% marks in
first
trimester exams,
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but
manages to reach 60-70% in second trimester, then he should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
due recognition for his
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hard
work. This would be a better motivation for a wider group of students.

To conclude
, it is necessary to reward all achievers
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–
the
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toppers
,
as well
as the ones showing
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good
progress in their study
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IELTS essay Some people believe schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others think that it is more crucial to reward students who show progress.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
332 words
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