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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.2

Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 2
Nowadays, some parents tend to give their children e-books to read. However, the others tend to buy printed books in brick and mortar stores. They have both pros and cons in children's development. First, we are familiar with printed materials for a long time such as newspapers, fairy tale stories, . . . It is obvious that we hold the materials by hand and read them. The pros are that your children can prevent their eyes from diseases such as epic and definitely no longer use glasses. However, printed materials are often edited in black and write that less appeal the youngsters. In contrast, those who choose online reading materials for their children allegedly influence in different ways. In today's modern world, intelligent technology is significantly developing leading more and more reading frameworks appeared. Parents that are almost young people with at least a smart phone can easily buy an online e book or download free reading documents. They can save a great deal of money as well as time by clicking. Moreover, online reading materials are designed with colourful pictures, integrated with attractive sounds and other tools that help boost the children's cognitive development. In the other hand, children may lose track of time when use phone, I pad or television. Take my son, for example, he often loses himself in using technology and ignores eating. In conclusion, parents should balance the time children using online reading materials and printed ones.
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parents tend to give their
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children
e-books to read.
However
, the others tend to
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buy
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printed
books in brick and mortar stores. They have both pros and cons in children's development.

First
, we are familiar with
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printed
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materials
for a long
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time
such as newspapers, fairy tale stories
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, .
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.
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It is obvious that we hold the
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materials
by hand and read them. The pros are that your
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children
can
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prevent
their eyes from diseases such as epic and definitely no longer
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use
glasses.
However
,
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printed
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materials
are
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often
edited in black and write that less appeal the youngsters.

In contrast
, those who choose
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online
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reading
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materials
for their
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children
allegedly influence in
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different
ways. In
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today
's modern world, intelligent technology is
significantly
developing leading more and more
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reading
frameworks appeared. Parents that are almost young
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people
with at least a smart phone can
easily
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buy
an
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online
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e book
or download free
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reading
documents. They can save a great deal of money
as well
as
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time
by clicking.
Moreover
,
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online
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reading
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materials
are designed
with
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colourful
pictures, integrated with attractive sounds and other tools that
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help
boost the children's cognitive development. In the other hand,
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children
may lose
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track
of
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time
when
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use
phone, I pad or television. Take my son,
for example
, he
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often
loses himself in using technology and
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ignores
eating.

In conclusion
, parents should balance the
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time
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children
using
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online
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reading
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materials
and
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printed
ones.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Learn everything you can, anytime you can, from anyone you can; there will always come a time when you will be grateful you did.
Sarah Caldwell

IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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