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In some countries, disabled people have to face a lot of troubles to access public and private facilities. What solution do you have to help such people? v.1

In some countries, disabled people have to face a lot of troubles to access public and private facilities. What solution do you have to help such people? v. 1
Many nations have no resources for handicapped people, so that they can safely provide access to all the public and private amenities. This essay will describe some feasible solutions to address this issue such as disabled parking and queue services as well as separate time frames at busy locations for these people. Primarily, municipal corporations should introduce the proposal of individual parking slots near the entrance of each facility. This way, disabled person would not have to walk long distance from the vehicle. In order to allocate this strategy, a written permit should be made to place in the front of car and bike. If other people use that place of parking, they should be penalized with a hefty ticket. Besides this, particular lines should be allocated to physically disabled people, it would help them to finish their task rapidly rather than standing for hours which can make them tired and physically unstable. For example, Walmart provides the services of special parking places along with specific counters for billing to serve physically challenged people. Hence, public bodies and private organisations can play vital role to help such people in an organised manner. Additionally, the set up of separate time frames for physically impaired people could be an effective plan. In this scenario, public facilities such as banks and hospitals can reserve a business hour especially for disabled people. As a result, they would not have to suffer from a huge rush and suffocation, and the employees would be able to answer all the queries adequately. For instance, Royal Bank of Canada has recently allocated first two hours of operations to elderly people due to COVID-19 in order to assist them individually, and on the top for their safety purpose. Therefore, this strategy would definitely help those who require special assistance. In the end, it is indispensable to say that it is our moral responsibility to respect disabled people in whatever way we can. Providing separate parking spaces and time frames are just some of the initial initiatives that countries can think about.
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nations have no resources for handicapped
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people
,
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so
that they can
safely
provide access to all the public and private amenities. This essay will
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describe
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some
feasible solutions to address this issue such as
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disabled
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parking
and queue services
as well
as separate time frames at busy locations for these
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people
.

Primarily
, municipal corporations should introduce the proposal of individual
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parking
slots near the entrance of each facility. This way,
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disabled
person would not
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have to
walk long distance from the vehicle. In order to allocate this strategy, a written permit should
be made
to place in the front of car and bike. If other
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people
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use
that place of
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parking
, they should
be penalized
with a hefty ticket.
Besides
this, particular lines should
be allocated
to
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physically
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disabled
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people
, it would
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help
them to finish their task
rapidly
rather
than standing for hours which can
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make
them tired and
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physically
unstable.
For example
, Walmart provides the services of special
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parking
places along with specific counters for billing to serve
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physically
challenged
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people
.
Hence
, public bodies and private
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organisations
can play vital role to
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help
such
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people
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in an organised manner
.

Additionally
, the set up of separate time frames for
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physically
impaired
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people
could be an effective plan. In this scenario, public facilities such as banks and hospitals can reserve a business hour
especially
for
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disabled
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people
.
As a result
, they would not
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have to
suffer from a huge rush and suffocation, and the employees would be able to answer all the queries
adequately
.
For instance
, Royal Bank of Canada has recently allocated
first
two hours of operations to elderly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
due to COVID-19 in order to assist them
individually
, and on the top for their safety purpose.
Therefore
, this strategy would definitely
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help
those who require special assistance.

In the
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end
, it is indispensable to say that it is our moral responsibility to respect
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disabled
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people
in whatever way we can. Providing separate
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parking
spaces and time frames are
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just
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some of the
initial initiatives that countries can
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think
about.
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IELTS essay In some countries, disabled people have to face a lot of troubles to access public and private facilities. What solution do you have to help such people? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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