Some people believe money is the best gift for teenegers, while others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1
Some people believe money is the best gift for teenegers, while others disagree. v. 1
In recent times, children have been given money either as a token of love or as a gesture of acceptance, but several people think that this has many negative impacts. Others viewing this is the best thing to do for those who are in teenage years. In my opinion, I support the latter’s concepts.
On the one hand, those who support giving money as a reward for children who are aged between 13 to 19 point out that this money would enable them to purchase something useful And I, personally believe in this idea. In other words, having gifted money, they could buy a necessary equipment, which support their educational requirements. Take mobile phones as an example, these days, it has become one of the primary sources of knowledge that nobody can deny that the application of this in various fields, with the amount, they could afford having one; eventually, most of these teenage students would perform even better with this device.
However, despite the above argument, the opponents of this belief advocate that when a teenager is gifted money, this can be utilised for unlawful acts: buying drugs, drinking alcohol, engaging anti-social activities. Apart from these, they may not understand the value of money and the amount of hard behind earning this. Although parents or well wishers give monies with a positive intention, many times this leads the young people to engage anti-social activities. A recent research has been published that conducted among millennials, report that those who are receiving a pocket money in a regular interval tend to be more spoiled than others.
In conclusion, while many argue that money is evil and children, who belonged to the teenage category, should not presented any money, I again reaffirm that totally against this, instead children should be taught how to use this effectively to have a better life.
In recent times,
children
have been
given
money
either as a token of
love
or as a gesture of acceptance,
but
several
people
think
that this has
many
negative
impacts. Others viewing this is the best thing to do for those
who
are in teenage years. In my opinion, I support the latter’s concepts.
On the one hand, those
who
support giving
money
as a reward for
children
who
are aged
between 13 to 19
point out that this
money
would enable them to
purchase
something useful And I,
personally
believe in this
idea
.
In other words
, having gifted
money
, they could
buy
a necessary equipment, which support their educational requirements. Take mobile phones as an example, these days, it has become one of the primary sources of knowledge that nobody can deny that the application of this in various fields, with the amount, they could afford
having
one;
eventually
, most of these teenage students would perform even better with this device.
However
, despite the above argument, the opponents of this belief advocate that when a
teenager
is gifted
money
, this can be
utilised
for unlawful acts: buying drugs, drinking alcohol, engaging anti-social activities. Apart from these, they may not understand the value of
money
and the amount of
hard
behind earning this. Although parents or
well wishers
give monies with a
positive
intention,
many
times this leads the young
people
to engage anti-social activities. A recent research has
been published
that conducted among millennials, report that those
who
are receiving a pocket
money
in a regular interval tend to be more spoiled than others.
In conclusion
, while
many
argue that
money
is evil and
children
,
who
belonged to the teenage category, should not
presented
any
money
, I again reaffirm that
totally
against this,
instead
children
should
be taught
how to
use
this
effectively
to have a better life.
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